<p>Is this good for the final line of my statement of purpose?</p>
<p>“I look forward to the opportunity of joining the University of *** Computer Science department as a graduate student in a mutually beneficial association.”</p>
<p>Its a bit wordy. But if it fits in with the rest of the essay then yes, without having seen the rest of it I couldn’t really tell you.</p>
<p>Leave out “as a graduate student”. It makes it too wordy and that should already be known from earlier in your statement/application.</p>
<p>I agree with sunshadow about taking out “as a graduate student.” Also, I’m not sure that the word “association” is quite right… what about capacity, alliance, union, body, arrangement?</p>
<p>Is this for a resume? In a resume, you should not use the word “I” and they should be succinct. if you can tell me the gist of what you’re trying to say, I can craft you a purpose line. If you don’t feel comfortable posting it, then feel free to PM me.</p>