Personal Statements + Analysis (Revised)

College Essays
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<p>I’ve uploaded some revised essays and comments this morning - </p>

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<p>Also, some pictures of the San Francisco Pride Parade that took place this weekend - </p>

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<p>Did kids write these and submit them to colleges or did you just write them as examples?</p>

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<p>I personally wrote them as examples. To preface - I’ve worked as a college counselor and have colleagues in admissions. These examples are intended for students with fairly strong backgrounds shooting for top 20 schools. </p>

<p>Students with less-distinctive academic records should consider a heavier tone. It can help convince your reader that you are truly serious about college and are finally setting your foot down.</p>