Please Critique my Admissions personal statement and GPA stats

Does anyone have a source that lists which UC’s read the personal statement?

The UCs that read PS as part of transfer admission: Berkeley, UCLA, San Diego, Irvine and Merced. However, they all read them for scholarship and/or financial aid criteria.

@lindyk8 do you know of a link that states that?

page 36:
http://admission.universityofcalifornia.edu/counselors/files/quick-reference-2014.pdf