<p>I am dedicated in many ways such as working in the emergency medical service, volunteer firefighter and being a father to 3 kids and a husband. Once at a Christmas dinner I got called out for a house fire and my dad, brother-in-law and I had to leave our wife and kids sitting there while we went to help a family in need.
My full-time job is working for Birchwood Safety and E.M.S. I work at least 40 hours a week and sometimes a lot more depending on how many emergency calls I get called out to. Here I had to pass a State of Michigan 80 hour course with state exams to become a medical first responder. Working in the emergency medical service takes a lot of continuing education classes. We have to take so many classes in a three-year period and have them registered with the State of Michigan. As a first responder you need 15 continuing education credits, as an emergency medical technician you need 30 continuing education credits, this is what I’m going for now. This is a 24 hour a day, 7 days a week and 365 days a year job. We have to be willing to work, anytime of the day, weekends and even holidays. Right now we do a rotation that makes us work either Thanksgiving or Christmas and then the following year you work the opposite holiday. So you have to be willing to spend time away from your family when there are major holidays.
I’m also a paid on call firefighter for Resort-Bear Creek Fire & Rescue. Here I serve as a firefighter II, hazardous material specialist, and fire officer III. Here we have to do a State or Michigan course that composes of a 200-hour course with state exams you must pass to become a firefighter. I have to attend weekly meeting every Thursday night for 3 hours working with my fire department on drills. This is also a 24-hour a day, 7 day a week and 365 day a year job. You never know when you’re going to get called out for a emergency, it could be on your kids first birthday, Christmas, family dinner or your kids school activities but this is part of the job and your family must accept it as that. You don’t make a living being a volunteer firefighter. We get paid just over minimum wage for an emergency and that’s okay because we do it for the love of helping people. I grew up as a son of a firefighter so it’s in my blood to continue on with what I saw my father do. My father is a big reason why I am so dedicated to my profession as he is also very dedicated to his job as being a fulltime firefighter.
I am a father of 3 lovely and amazing kids and a husband to a fantastic wife. Marissa is 8 years old, Brohnson is 6 years old and Paytyn is 2 years old, so that gives me 2 girls and 1 boy. My kids keep me on my toes with wanting to wrestle with me on my free time, keeping up with the kid’s school sports and having to take them all too different appointments that they may have. I also have a wonderful wife, Elise who is very supportive to me in all my career paths. She is my rock and always has been. She is the strongest person I know and she will do anything for anyone. We have been married for 9 years now and I would not trade our journey in life together with any other person in the world. She is my wife, my best friend and one amazing mother to my kids. She works part-time when I am off so she can stay at home with our kids so that we don’t have to pay for daycare. Daycare is too expensive and by the time she would work fulltime we would be paying all that back in daycare so she works part-time and I work fulltime to cover the rest. I think this is tuff sometimes on us but right now it’s the best thing we can do tell all the kids are in school. I will do anything for my parents that I can. They are getting older and I love to help them out as much as I can because I know, in my career that life is way too short. My dad recently suffered a near death heart attack almost 2 years ago where his heart had quit working and the firefighters he works with had to perform CPR to save his life. Thank god that they brought him back. I would not know what to do right now without my dad. He had to have a quadruple bypass. He had less than a 1% chance to live and he beat those odds. When he was in the hospital for a week, I stayed with him until he came home. This made me realize life is too short and my family has since meant a lot more to me.
I hope you can see why I would consider myself dedicated in anything that I put my heart too. I wish that more people would be more dedicated to things that are important to them.</p>
<p>Putting essays and personal information on this forum is a bad idea. Usually, if you ask for help, you can private message the essay to a person that will read it.</p>
<p>What was the essay prompt? And for what school? For me, the essay read a bit long and filled with some details that might not make a difference to an admission officer. Of course, if I were in admissions, I would accept you just based on the fact that you are a bona-fide hero.</p>
<p>But if I had to provide some feedback it woudl be: Lose the last sentence, it is not in keeping with your overall essay. Streamline your essay, it is all over the place, from kids to family to dad. Make it about you, your goals, your needs. Use jumping points that are repetitive to start each paragraph maybe: “I want to be a good Father”, “I want to be a good Husband”, “I want to be a good Son”, “I want to be good to my community”, and then let each paragraph flow from there, starting with where you are now, and where you hope to be. Be positive, and a bit less detailed about the classes and hours, and a bit more detailed about how more education can help you become all the things you wish to. YOu have some great material, and you have lived a great life, so getting an admissions person to want to beg you to attend their school should not be an issue.</p>
<p>Good luck.</p>