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<p>The opinion of the majority is not only correct, but necessary in maintaining a government. Several examples from cinema and history clearly prove that my viewpoint is legitimate.</p>

<pre><code>In the war of 1812, the opinion of many saved the countless lives of everyone in Washington D.C… The country’s capital was a terrible place to be in the fall of 1813. In fact, most of the cities in the nation were captured by the British. A number of the population was left homeless and famished. The only place that was left standing was Washington D.C.—even that city had problems. James Madison wanted to call a state of emergency in fear of British invasion. However, the opinion of many thwarted his asinine idea. The best idea that was available was to protect the city at no cost. Thus, the opinions of the citizens of D.C. saved thousands of people from having no form of government. It’s better to fight for what is yours.

In the film Persepolis by Marjane Strapi, the citizen’s of Iran had to over throw Fereydoun for his asinine ideas about the government. In the late 1980’s, a crazed dictator ruled Iran. His name was Fereydoun he was purely evil. He didn’t want anyone in Iran to have the freedom to learn, read, and write. However, the people of Iran didn’t care for Fereydoun. They grew weary of their countries corrupt government. On the summer of 1985, Fereydoun was assassinated while giving a speech. The people Iran rejoiced after his funeral. As a result, the people were allowed to voice their opinion. The new leader was far better and allowed every to have their freedom. Thus, the citizens of Iran’s ideas of their country proved to be better than Fereydoun’s.
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<p>After a critical analysis of the film Persepolis and the war in Iran, the majority’s opinion is always right. Had the people of Iran or the citizen’s of D.C. been timid, they would have not maintained their governments. Their opinion of the masses is far better than just one. </p>

<p>P.S. Can anyone give me suggestions on how to fabricate information for essay examples properly?</p>

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<p>“fabricate information”</p>

<p>That’s not the way to utilize events in an essay.</p>

<p>As for your score: 3.</p>

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<p>A paragraph is 3 sentences. Your first “paragraph” is only two. Include a commentary line and you should be fine.
Your sentences are very choppy and sound like just awkward summary. I’m sorry but I’d give it a pretty low grade.
Fabricate information? Do you mean analyze?</p>

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<p>My biggest problem is writing essays for prompts that I am unfamiliar with. How do you exactly think I should research and prepare myself for them?</p>