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<p>Prompt- Is it always better to be original than to imitate or use the ideas of others?</p>

<p>Originality is crucial for society’s development as well as personal development. Several examples from literary works clearly demonstrate how originality is better than conformist views. </p>

<p>In Alice Munro’s anthology Runaway there are a plethora of short-stories that deal with the concept of originality. Perhaps the second story deals the topic most candidly. The story is about two twins: Juliet and Carla. Juliet is the older of the two twins and she despises the life her parents planned out for her. She longs to discover who she truly is. Therefore, she embarks on a journey across country and along the way meets a guy names Mark. Together they discover themselves through each other, and soon after get married. On the other hand, Carla remains home and marries the boy her parents pick have selected for her although she does not harbor any feelings for him. In the end, Juliet is happier with her life than Carla—a direct result of her originality and by her rejecting her parents ideas.</p>

<p>Fahrenheit 451 is another literary work that elucidates on how being original is better than following and/or using the ideas of others. Living in a futuristic society, Montag is a fireman who ironically creates fires instead of putting the out. The items he is ordered to burn are books. However, after Montag reads a book, he decides that they are great additions to society. Thus, he successfully challenges the status qou and in essence rebels against the accepted ideas. In the end, Montag was able to preserve great literary work and advance society. </p>

<p>After a careful analysis of Alice Munro’s anthology Runaway and Fahrenheit 451, one can see that originality, indeed, is evidently better than using the ideas of others. If, in the future, people continue to “be their own person,” no matter how trite that sounds, then one can count on a rapidly progressing society. </p>

<p>I would appreciate feedback on bettering this essay as well as a grade! Also, is this too short?</p>

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<p>1) ‘Plethora’ is singular. Therefore, you should have used ‘there is a plethora’, not ‘there are a plethora’.</p>

<p>2) I vaguely recall reading somewhere that ‘demonstrate that’ is the correct idiomatic phrase, and not ‘demonstrate how’. I am not sure about this though.</p>

<p>3) I assume this is a typographical error, but ‘qou’ is incorrect. The correct spelling is ‘quo’.</p>

<p>But other than these minor errors, your essay was fantastic. I’d give it a 5 or a 6. Good job!</p>