Please Grade My Essay

<p>I would really apreciate it if you guys would grade my essay and give me some advice.</p>

<p>"Are bad choices and good choices equally likely to have ngative consequence"?</p>

<p>I'm not sure If I've answered the question fully, after reading the topic it seems I went off on a tangent a little in the intro. Pleas comment anway.</p>

<p>A choice is similar to a risk, specifically since we never know what the consequences may be. We may generally think that good choices will result positively and negaitve choices, negatively. However life is not this idealistic and there is no formula to calculate its consequences.</p>

<p>Many works of literature depict the claim that life has no real formula for consequence. In the novella The Pearl by John Steinbeck, Kino, the main character, finds a magneficent pearl that is supposed to aid in getting medical attention for his son. Kino's ambition takes captive of him and he desires for more. Therefore, Kino chooses to leave his town inorder to get a higher offer for his pearl. Consequently his son is killed by trackers who heard about his magnificent pearl. Kino's good fortune ironically leads to his son's death and he eventually discards his pearl.</p>

<p>However in the drama Macbeth, its main character Macbeth also faces negative consequences though his choices were not initially good as Kino's were. Macbeth was told by witches that he will be dubed Thane of Glamis and King. After receiving the former title Macbeth decides he must be made king. Therefore, he murders and becomes deeply involved in evil to get the title. One may think that his choices led to a postive result, he became king! However Macbeth's reign is short lived since he was murdered.</p>

<p>It it therefore evident that choices do determine consequences however these choices must be mixed with fate to determine a final consequence that one may either regret or celebrate.</p>

<p>I am not a genius but I'd give it a 9-10.</p>

<p>i would give it a 8-10 kinda leaning to 9 though. You could of used b etter than only lit. examples (use like a history example). Its defeinetly easier IMO to say that only one has neg. consequences or neither. ALso you need a better vocab. For instance in the second paragraph change depict to delineate. There are many parts in your essay that need this. However your points DO say on the topic. One describes a good and one describes a bad choice. Therefore I am kinda of leaning now to a 9-10.</p>

<p>I'd give it a 9 as well. I would always stray from using "we" if possible (rephrase) and there are some typos/misspellings/grammar mistakes that may or may not have been part of the original essay. </p>

<p>As for your support, I think those are good examples. Elaborate on them more if possible, as longer is typically always better. I would try and get around 3 sentences into your conclusion, which is sometimes difficult, but helpful.</p>

<p>Hope that helps!</p>

<p>thanks a lot for the comments</p>