Please grade my essay

<p>Topic: Is conscience a more powerful motivator than money, fame, or power?</p>

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<p>Could someone please grade and comment on my essay? Thanks in advance!</p>

<p>I think it’s quite good but, if I have to flind a flaw in it, I’d say the conclusion is a bit weak. Try not only to repeat the prompt but also to add some contrasting examples to support and make your thesis stronger.
Maybe some stronger comment at the end may impress the grader a bit more.
:)</p>

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