PLEASE HELP ME>> I am begging you.

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<p>Columbia,</p>

<p>Bluealien si right. You gotta scrap this paper. Even if your go with the premise of “Choose a job you love, and you will never have to work a day in your life”-Confucius.
You have to let the reader know what are the factors that make a person love their job. We gave you a jumping off point in some of these previous links. Most people who love their jobs tend to be intrinsically motivated as yo usee from the list of factors money is not at the top of the list.</p>

<p>Since you want to talk about having a job you love and working hard,
What consitutes working hard work- sweat equity, mentally challenges, personality obstacles.</p>

<p>If you need to talk it out loud and see if it makes sense to you</p>

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<p>Columbia, You are sticking to an awkward set of three examples that are not parallel in structure so they make for an jumbled essay.</p>

<p>You have been given BETTER ways to refute Confucius, above. You need to rework the essay.</p>

<p>The way to refute the statement is to find good examples of why someone who IS well educated, talented & financially successful could love a job that is still a mountain of work for them. </p>

<p>Love for a job does not always mean the job is a breeze. </p>

<p>You can love being a pediatric oncologist and nobody would suggest this isn’t a heartbreaking, difficult, draining job.</p>

<p>You can <em>BE</em> Michael Jordan and love your job, and yet have to spend hours in a gym doing weight training, weeks out of town on airplanes & in hotels missing your family, etc.</p>

<p>Many beloved jobs will have difficult aspects that will make them “work.”</p>

<p>Don’t beat a dead horse; re-do your beginning!!</p>

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<p>This is really intresting because I consulted three English teachers, and at least five other students on this paper. Our teacher gave us four days basically, to write the first draft, second, and the third is due tommorow. But two of the English teachers say the paper is horrible. All the students that have read my paper say it just needs a better thesis, and supports. Then after school today, I went to English teacher and she said it was pretty good,the same paper I posted. Do you understand, my own English teacher is one who even wrote my thesis for me. I go prestige school, all the teachers are good but she not really harsh. For like me, I know since she knows I work really hard, and I am studious kid she always like gives me A’s or B+ on papers. Sometimes I am suprised becasue I know my paper horrible in punctuation,grammer, at least I think so. I don’t know, just hopefull next year I will have better English teacher who is willing to give me an F because my papers suck, and not because oh I work so hard, and that stuff… But I dont know who to listen to, so I am just going to listen to myself, and write what I feel. If I get an F, oh well you can’t win em all…</p>

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<p>Thinking back to high school, my essays were crap compared to what I write now. Actually the only class I even remember writing English essays for in high school was called composition. I also wrote a research paper for my senior English class. Now, almost every college English class (if not all) consists of not just tests, but essays and papers. I’m not really sure why this is the case. Anyone care to guess at why?</p>

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<p>"Then after school today, I went to English teacher and she said it was pretty good,the same paper I posted. Do you understand, my own English teacher is one who even wrote my thesis for me. "</p>

<p>I fully understand, because this is basically what I indicated to you in December when you posted about wanting to go to Columbia and other posters and I pointed out that you needed to seriously improve your writing.</p>

<p>Clearly, your teachers have not been bothering to do a good job of teaching you. Either they don’t know any better (and that’s possible. I have seen recommendation letters written by AP English teachers who used poor grammar) or they think they are doing you a favor by giving you good grades for effort instead of correcting you and teaching you.</p>

<p>Several of us including me have given you some suggestions which you haven’t bothered to take. Thus, go right ahead and turn in the paper as is, and you’ll probably get an “A” because the teacher’s grades are based on how much she likes you or feels sorry for you, not on your actual work.</p>

<p>Meanwhile, every time that you settle for those kind of grades instead of taking good advice, you will continue to cheat yourself and to reduce your chances of getting into the kind of colleges that you say you desire to enter. You can’t simply rely on hopes that next year’s teacher will be better. You need to take advantage of the good advice that is available here and elsewhere. </p>

<p>You will have to write essays to get into colleges, and the excellent colleges will not be forgiving of inadequate writing. You’ll also have to write an essay for the new SAT I, and the testing service will not give top grades based on effort. The paper that you have been struggling with here is similar to the type of essay that you’ll be expected to write for the new SAT I.</p>

<p>To get a good score, the writing would need to be clear, the grammar excellent, and you’d need to provide examples from current events, literature, history or science. You’d have to do all of this within about a half hour. This is why you should not settle for doing what gets by with your English teacher now. Continue to settle for what she expects and there is no way that you’ll do well on the essay section of the new SAT I. Remember, too, that colleges will see the essay as well as your score.</p>

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<p>NSM–It is really nice that you are really helpful, and I really appreciate it. But you said “Several of us including me have given you some suggestions which you haven’t bothered to take.” How do you know I haven’t bothered, I am reading books, looking at grammer books, looking at the grammer part in the SAT prep book. How do you know I haven’t tried.? I am not perfect you know, I can’t do 50million at one time. I am failing math, I have 3weeks to bring a D to B+, and trying to read books, do homework, study for this and that. I am not superwomen. Do you understand the pressure that I am on? My parents want this grade, and that grade. I dont think you understand. In the final analysis if I don’t do good at anything I do, I will end up blaming my self, and be another FAILURE>Oh well if no college accepts me because I can’t write probably, I will just go back to Africa, where they will accept me. Because right now I dont care about colleges anymore. Forget it. I am tired…SIck and tired of school. So don’t even say I am not trying.dont…</p>

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<p>I referred specifically to the suggestions that several of us had made on this thread. I don’t see any evidence that you followed up our suggestions when you revised your essay. If you did revise based on some of our comments, please point it out to me because what I have noticed is that you seem to be clinging to the same ideas, which are not working.</p>

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<p>okay, now Breathe. </p>

<p>I am sure that you are under a lot of pressure right now but after you have your mini meltdown, all of the things you need to do will still need to be done. </p>

<p>No one is asking you to be perfect as all you owe you and yourself is your best work (there willbe times in your life that your will have to take your “B” or “C” like a woman and move on because you did the best you could do) Have you tried writing out a plan of action (nothing formal, just a list of what you need to do and how you are going to get it done)</p>

<p>Math Goal: Gring up math grade</p>

<p>How:</p>

<p>Get tutoring
Ask teacher for help
do practice problems in the book
Review old test. Color code the parts that you got wrong. See if you are making careless errors.</p>

<p>Paper </p>

<p>what is it that you want to say
How do you back it up? research, personal interviews with people you know who love their jobs
what do they all have in common?
How do they see their job as being hard. How does the love of the job out weigh the challenges. </p>

<p>Sometimes you have to write, walk away and then come back to it to see things differently. writing is a process, and sometimes there is a lot of crumpled paper before you get out a good piece of work.</p>

<p>I think you may also have a few time management issues going on which may be the main reason you are feeling overwhelmed right now. You really have ot get your self on a schedule which in cludes getting up and going to bed at regular hours. Set your self up a little schedule saying I am going to do
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2.
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<p>and stick to the schedule. Right now, if you are home maybe you need to set your clock for 30 to 45 minutes, take a nap and give your mind a rest.</p>

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<p>When does school start?
When does school end?
When do you get home from school?
How long do you spend on homework (this includes reading, assigned homework problems, writing papers, etc.) per day?
How many classes are you taking and what are your grades in them? (The ones that you are doing poorly in need more immediate attention to now). </p>

<p>I remember reading a thread before about your math class–is it the same math class that you are having trouble in or a new one this semester? Is there someone in your class that you can study with for tests? Are tutors available?</p>

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<p>Or a lot of retyping. I do not know why, but I cannot write really good essays unless I sit at a computer and just start typing. Fortunately, the papers are out of class and must be typed anyway. Columbia, are you not required to type your papers? For the grammar and spelling part of your papers, MS Word would probably pick up a lot of the mistakes that you are making (not all though–proof reading a typed paper a couple of times is really the only way to catch all errors).</p>

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<p>“How do you back it up? research, personal interviews with people you know who love their jobs”</p>

<p>This is what I didn’t see you doing with your paper. Research is the key to writing virtually any paper, even the kind of essay that you were assigned. It is impossible to produce thoughtful analysis if all that you’re relying on is your gut feelings and instincts. Doing this is like trying to start a car that is without gas.</p>

<p>Take the time to have either looked at some of the research about job satisfaction or to talk to people about why they liked/disliked their jobs, and whether they consider their jobs to be “work” would have been a more efficient use of time than simply thinking and thinking and thinking about what to write. You also handicapped yourself in writing the essay by jumping to a conclusion – people who have skills or talent to do a job don’t have to do any hard work to do the job – that wasn’t true. Another example of where you jumped to an erroneous conclusion was your assumption that people love their jobs because of the money that they make.</p>

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<p>I’d also like to add that I’ve never heard of turning in 3 drafts. Maybe it’s just me though.</p>

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<p>When I was teaching college journalism at a third tier college, I had students turn in 3 drafts on major assignments. That’s because I found that without having to do 3 graded drafts, students would try to write without doing enough research or analysis. They would have first drafts filled with puff, but lacking in facts and information.</p>

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<p>Columbia–Northstarmom is steering you in the right direction. Have you had a job? Several jobs? Which jobs seemed the hardest? Why? If you haven’t had that much experience “working”, then ask some (older probably!) people who have held different jobs or even switched careers these questions. Ask them why some jobs felt like “work” and some did not, or not as much. Ask some of them why even though they are doing something they love, it sometimes feels like “work.” For instance, I have a friend who is a singer, who sings in the opera chorus of a well known opera company–she is doing what she loves, but there are aspects of her job that make it “hard.” But everytime she contemplates doing something else, she realizes that this is what she loves to do. Find some people or even one person like that–could be a teacher who loves his/her job-- and talk to him/her/them!</p>

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<p>C4life: IMHO you’ve got too many chefs, but you’re the cook (no offense to the posters who are trying to help you). From your posts, it appears you’ve consulted, at a minimum, 3 teachers, 5 students, CC parents, and a “writing/editing” website of some sort. To me, that’s a lot of wasted time and energy. Writing is hard work. Rather than spending so much time and energy showing your paper to so many people, why not just force yourself to sit down, think things through, write, step back, re-write/edit and then submit. The worst that will happen is that you’ll get a bad grade. Better to learn how to think, analyze and write now - in high school – then down the road. Good luck.</p>

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<p>Basically the reason my crazy teacher decided to do this paper, beause this whole week 10th grade students are taking the OGT. Ohio Graduation Test which includes: Social Studies, Math, Science,Reading and Writing. So last the first day we received a prompt in English class. The whole idea was to prepare us for the OGT, and it would a real grade an 80point paper. There were two prompts I went with the Confucius one. We had to hand write a 5paragraph persuasive paper in a 40min period. I finish and I thought it was good, but the next day our teacher gave the paper and I received a 3/6.</p>

<p>That is how the score on the OGT 1,2,3,4,5,6, 6 being the best. So she was scoring how she would score me, if I wrote that on the OGT. So she decied all the papers were bad, to extend the time and make us write it again but at home.So I was sort of confused, because I thought the paper was really good. But I went after school, and realized that I had misread the quote, and wrote the wrong supports, since i misread the quote. So we were now suppose to type draft 2 at home, and peer edit in-class the next day. So my mind went crazy, because I had to re-write a whole new paper because I went wrong the first time. So the next day, I went to write place consulted alot English teachers, who told me my paper was bad. Consulted students and they said I needed a better thesis. I went my teacher after school again for 4th time,because we started the paper on Thursday, did the 2nd draft over the weekend and stuff, and final copy was due today. So my teacher like skims through it and she says my supports are good, and it was fine. She said it was in the right direction, and now I am thinking people just told me it was wrong, and all these ppl on CC said it was wrong, and it needed better supports, and my teacher is saying it was right. No offense but she is my teacher, and I have to listend to her. So I turned in the paper it is different than the one I posted, I got the someone to help me on it. So the point the whole paper was not interview people, or research it was on what you know.
So end of story, I dont really care because it was pointless paper to begin with. </p>

<p>“When I was teaching college journalism at a third tier college, I had students turn in 3 drafts on major assignments. That’s because I found that without having to do 3 graded drafts, students would try to write without doing enough research or analysis. They would have first drafts filled with puff, but lacking in facts and information”–For my english teacher NSM If you don’t turn in 3 drafts for any paper we write, in or out of class you fail. There has to be three drafts that are each revised, the third being your final copy.</p>

<p>But anyway, to the one post asked. My school starts at 7:50 and ends at 3.:10…I constanly stay after to get geometry help… You put so much effort into a class, and you don’t show improvement of any kind, that is sort of sad. I take Science, English, French 3, Theatre, Geometry, U.S History, and a free period. I don’t take Honors or AP because I am not willing to give myself more work at stuff I know wont excel in, although I am taking Honors French next year. Grades: English-A-, Science-B-(dropped from a 97 to a 80), French-B+, Theatre-A, History-A, Geometry- D. My goal was to get all A’s and a B+ in French, but everytime I set a goal it backfires. For the person that asked what time I start doing homeowork. I normally start doing homeowork at 6.00pm. Because I rest, or talk on the phone wit a friend, it depends on the amount of homework, and my school gives alot of homework. But sometimes I have tests in all class, and homework. So I do homework first and study. I do my homework from easiest to hardest. Math is always last, and I normally sleep at 1.am…I have math and french tutoring, once each week. Math use to be twice a week, but before I was showing improvment I was getting a B+ and so I cut the day off, but now things gone crazy. But oh well, I dont really care anymore, I go to school to learn, as long as I learn. If end up going to community college because no college will accept me oh well, as long as I learn. Because education is key to success. I will be successful, no matter what it takes, no matter how I write, or no matter what anybody says. Because the success in life, and in school lies in me.Ok, ok. </p>

<p>Peace</p>

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<p>6 PM to 1 AM on homework and studying is way too long for high school. Anyone else agree with this? I never stayed up past 10 or 11 pm on school work in high school. I’ve read before that you should do work from the hardest to the easiest and not the other way around. </p>

<p>For Geometry–After you go in for extra help on the material covered in class during the week, are you able to do all or most of the homework without a problem? Do you get most of the problems for math correct after receiving the extra help? Do you freeze on the tests? Maybe it is the particular subject. Some people may have test anxiety for certain subjects. </p>

<p>The rest of your grades look fine to me. How long does the semester last? You probably still have time to pull up your grades.</p>

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<p>Yeah, easiest to hardest is a terrible idea.</p>

<p>You shouldn’t be trying to do homework you find difficult when you’re tired.</p>

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<p>I have slept at 3am sometimes, do you understand my school is very competitive. It is like near number in Ohio top schools or something. Alot kids graduate with high GPA’s. It is like the best, the amount of work that we receive is alot, and I mean ALOT. My french tacher this week, I have a quiz everyday Mon-Thursday, this is OGT week but some teachers dont give alot hw and quizzes. But some teachers, like my french teacher she still give us alot homework… It is very hard, it is not easy… I take my time studying too, and study the best I can. I never look at the clock, I get what has to get done. If it is 1.00am and I am still studying History, and I still have to study French then i will. I will get it done…It is just it is for, I get everything done. I always have my homework done, ALWAYS></p>

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<p>Um, apologies for giving unwanted advice, Columbia, I guess I was misled by the title of the thread . . . Good luck to you.</p>