<p>Deadline is fast approaching, I need some help!</p>
<p>I am always captivated by the capabilities of the brain. It amazes me that the brain is one of the least understood subjects in science. In my junior year, I explored this subject by contacting the biology department at the University of Akron, and securing an opportunity to work under Dr. Liu, an assistant professor at the Department of Biology. Dr. Lius research dealt with the neural regeneration capabilities of the zebrafish. My research project investigated the cadherin protein expression in the regenerating zebrafish cerebellum. My results showed an increase in cadherins during the regeneration process, but decreased after the brain was regenerated. This led me to conclude that cadherins might play an important role in the replacement of cells. The findings from this research may have important clinical implications for the human central nervous system. Humans also express cadherin and studying them might prove a step towards healing spinal cord injury and other nervous system damage. </p>
<p>At Northwestern University, I would pursue a major in biology with a concentration in neurobiology. At the Department of Neurobiology and Physiology, I would be able to utilize my skills in undergraduate research. Some of the current research in the Department relates to the research I conducted, especially the studies being conducted by Dr. Farbman and Dr. Raman. Another research that I find appealing is that of Dr. Dallos study of neurobiology in the cochlea. His research focuses on the role a certain protein plays on the outer hair cells which are cochlear amplifiers. Being partially hard of hearing, I was excited to see research done on hearing from a neurobiological perspective. Northwesterns excellent neuroscience department will allow me to learn from and work alongside its exceptional faculty. </p>
<p>(I also need help on my original essay, I’ll e-mail them to you if you are willing to help me. Or if you want me to post it on the thread, inform me.)</p>
<p>I think the second paragraph is more pertinent to the question of why you want to go to NU, but the first paragraph doesn’t seem to be very relevant… at least not all of it anyway. I would say try to connect more why NU is where you want to be.</p>
<p>It isn’t so much lack of transition as lack of focus. The first paragraph seems that you just want to talk about your research rather than the question at hand. I’m not saying it’s a bad essay… it just may not be pertinent.</p>
<p>Edit: I reread it… I do see where you’re going but I’m not sure that it’s the best way to go, just my two cents.</p>
<p>I tried to use my research to explain my interest in NU’s neuroscience department. I think I’ll cut it shorter. Is it okay that research is the only reason I want to go there? I mean, I love chicago, I can talk about that too, but is it better to focus on only one aspect (research)?</p>
<p>ahh the deadline is almost here and i’m still working on this thing. i noticed that you dont have a conclusion. neither do i! do they really expect us to do the whole intro, body, conclusion bit in 300 words or is it just better to say what you NEED to say and be done with it? i’m only focusing on three things: the medill program, diversity at NU, and Chicago. i mean, i have more things i like about it (midwest location, size of student body, gorgeous campus, prestige, yadayada) but i feel like if i try to say ALL of my reasons it will be a laundry list instead of a well-focused essay. what is your take on this, anyone…??</p>