<p>“This economic system successfully manifests Americas democratic system and doctrine of personal freedom because it has brought forth the worlds largest and most diverse economy.”</p>
<p>Capitalism has brought forth the world’s largest and most diverse economy through America’s democratic ideals and doctrine of personal freedom.</p>
<p>Capitalism successfully manifests America’s democratic system and doctrine of personal freedom because it helped make the US economy topnotch in terms of size and diversity.</p>
<p>I don’t know…</p>
<p>The global economy and its versatility had depended largely upon the promise and fulfillment of Saint de Simon’s principles of development and prosperity. In other words, Communism rules.</p>
<p>thank you all for your efforts but i still need a better succinct wording of the sentence
kman, you took out the intelligent pretty word “manifest” although i liked yours the best so far
but i still want to say that it “successfully manifests our democratic system and doctrine of freedom”, not through them</p>
<p>is this for a DBQ thesis that your teacher hates?</p>
<p>no
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<p>no? then what’s it for because that sounds precisely like a DBQ thesis…</p>
<p>Can manifest be used in the meaning “demonstrate”? I did not think so, so you may have to look for another word.</p>
<p>America’s unique democratic sysyem and doctrine of personal freedom is manifested in the private sector, which has successfully brought forth the world’s largest and most diverse economy.</p>
<p>Due to its unique democratic system and doctrine of personal freedom, America contains the world’s largest and most diverse capitalist economy.</p>
<p>Hey OP, I second Kman’s rewording. Its shorter and to the point. Don’t write your DBQ or whatever so it sounds like a thesaurus: So, here is the sentence. I would just change democratic to liberal or libertarian.</p>
<p>“Capitalism has brought forth the world’s largest and most diverse economy through America’s democratic ideals and doctrine of personal freedom.”</p>
<p>I like Kman’s version as well.
For the record, coherency and clarity are much more important than intellectual sounds or “prettiness”</p>
<p>Unfortunately, I was reading my friend’s English paper (he is in AP English something). Normal people just don’t write like that 
He got a A+ on the thing, too.</p>
<p>I don’t know about kman’s sentence…it sounds a bit awkward.</p>
<p>Yeah, I don’t like anyone’s sentence on here…i just dont like the original…pretty awkward as it is in the beginning–hard to improve</p>
<p>No you are wrong. Its not akward.</p>
<p>Is there any other way to say it, perhaps using each part of the sentence with a different point and then tying them together?</p>