I am a Vietnamese student preparing for my common app 2016-2017.
Would someone please help me critique my essay? I don’t know who to ask in my area.
Please help me, I am very grateful!
Thank you 
Your English teacher?
Already asked 
but they said they could not help me much because they didnt have much experience critiqueing common app essays. My English teachers mostly specialize on teaching basic Eng for students from secondary to high school 
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