Please read and critique my SHORT common app essay

<p>this is my rough draft…</p>

<p>You’ll notice that your work has been deleted. This is for your own good! I know you’d like advice, but don’t broadcast your work.</p>

<p>If you’d like me to read it, critique it, and/or edit it, please send it to my email <a href="mailto:four.years@yahoo.com">four.years@yahoo.com</a> Include your prompt and schools on your list.</p>

<p>actually it was deleted at my request.</p>

<p>i’ll gladly take a look at it and give some feedback.</p>

<p>Sure, I’d be glad to help.</p>