please review my common app essay

<p>The essay contains grammatical errors and since I'm not very good with grammar I'd really appreciate it if someone could point them out pm me and I'll pm my essay back</p>

<p>Bump......</p>

<p>Bump.......</p>

<p>There's actually a separate forum just for college essays, but I'd be happy to read it over if you pm it to me. </p>

<p>Also, if you don't mind, I'd appreciate your feedback on my post (the "Urgent Question regarding ethnicity" one)</p>

<p>PM me, if you would like.</p>

<p>@eatlovepray did you receive my message? it's not showing anything in the sent items</p>