pleaseee help with my essay!! I give cookie!

<p>Hey everyone I am a technology kind of kid, math/science... majoring in computer science. I will apply to MIT/Stanford, a few Ivies and a few safeties, etc. Please read my common app essay that I just wrote, it really needs improvement... I need help with the beginning, and also grammar. It is not quite good enough for these schools, but I can definitely improve it with your help, and a few days of work.</p>

<p>Thanks a lot! Post here or pm for essay.</p>