Plz grade my Nov 2014 Int'l SAT essay!!

<p>Should we complain to get what we want?</p>

<p>Although some people may think complaining comes first to obtain what they want, in fact, complaining in many cases does not change the situation. As Rita Dove has put it, “There are times in life when, instead of complaining, you do something about your complaints”, we should take actions rather than wasting time complaining. Two historical examples, Jacob Riis and Rachel Carson, through their lifetime achievements, support the statement that it is not the best for us to complain to get what we want. </p>

<p>Jacob Riis is an excellent example of my belief. During the guild era, Jacob Riis, an immigrant from Denmark, worked the most crime-ridden and impoverished slums of New York as a police reporter. He had desire to express the devastating conditions of New York’s poorhouses through text-based journalism but failed to raise awareness. Rather than complaining about those who were not paying attention to other people in need, he chose to find out a clever way to raise the awareness of deprived conditions of the poorhouses, which eventually led to a success of his aim of instigating people’s reactions. Therefore, Jacob Riis revealed the dreadful reality of poorhouses in New York by employing and adding photography into his articles for the first time in history. Had he not started to insert photography into articles and just shouted out his complaints, the effects should have been lesser. </p>

<p>Rachel Carson is another fine example to illustrate the statement that we should not complain in order to attain what we want. At the highpoint for chemical industry, the demand for nitrates during WWII has massively expanded the industry. Rachel Carson, who was a biologist as well as a writer, methodically explored impact of these agro-chemical products on animal life, the soil, the water supply and rivers, and on humans. Then, she wished to inform public of the danger of DDT on environment, but soon was criticized by chemical industries and government alarmist for her call for ban of DDT. Even though there was a fierce opposition on her, she did not complain to the public about their ignorance but instead decided to make her writing skill honed to achieve her goal. Thus, she searched for an effective method of lyrical prose, finally publishing “Silent Spring.” She successfully brought an attention to harm caused by chemical industry as diverse media provided her book as dependable research work. In this way, she could not only contribute to changes in environment policies but also exhibited a way to employ their skills and causes to attain what they want rather than complaining.</p>

<p>Complaining may seem like to be the first thing to do in order to achieve what we want. Yet, there is a more intelligent way to make what we want into reality. Complaints only ensue more complaints rather than giving an ultimate solution to the problem.</p>

<p>I wrote kind of differently… I wrote it almost right after I took the test … Now I’m uploading it finally…</p>

<p>Do you think I can get 10 or above? </p>

<p>Grade it please! Thank you… <3 </p>