Would anyone be willing to privately proofread my college essay, I am unsure if the topic is one that works for an admissions essay and I just need some reassurance that the whole thing even makes sense.
Yes I can!
I recommend you ask a trusted English teacher to read your essay.
If you do send it to someone on CC be sure it is an adult with a long posting history.
And make sure you do NOT post it anywhere, or you may find yourself accused of having plagiarized your own essay!
I will offer a brief critique if you PM your essay to me.
OP: Since you have fewer than 15 posts, you will have to send it via return PM so I will PM you.
Are you still needing help? I would love to look over it and provide detailed feedback.
Agree with you, the same situation has happened with my friend once(