Proofread my Common App essay? (due Feb 1st) Posted so everyone can see!

<h2>Hi! I would just like some input on my essay. Can somebody be kind enough to give me some input on what I should fix or add? And also, anybody have an idea for a conclusion paragraph? Thanks! :)</h2>

<p>Imagine waking up in the middle of the night to warplanes dropping bombs next to you. This was a reality for me; my family and I were at the wrong place at the wrong time.</p>

<p>Waking up on July 22, 2006 was like waking up on any other summer day in Lebanon; the first sounds of the day where always the car horns going off in the streets, then shortly after you get a whiff of the beautiful smell of thyme from the local bakery. Getting up from my bed every day was the best feeling because I knew that that day was going to be filled with joy and excitement. I didn't expect anything different, but why would I? Every other day before this I had great times with my relatives touring famous landmarks, eating the best Lebanese food, and overall enjoying the weather by going to the beaches and doing outdoor activities. I did not have the slightest doubt in my mind that I going to be in for an exciting day and summer until I woke up that night.</p>

<pre><code>Surprisingly, it was the dull whispers and rustling of people that woke me up, not the first explosion. I had barely opened my eyes when my mom said in Arabic “Everything is ok, just go back to sleep”. Except as soon as soon as saw her teary eyed face, I knew something was wrong; I couldn't go back to sleep.

<p>I was confused at first, but then I sat up and saw the worried looks on everybody’s faces. My cousins and grandparents where sitting on the couches while my mom, dad, uncle, and aunt where talking quietly talking on the other side of the room. The curtains on our apartment’s balcony where completely shut, making everything mostly dark. The usual sounds of Beirut’s night where absent which was eerie to me. It felt like there wasn’t a hint of life around the living room we sat in. </p>

<p>The first thing I wanted to do was ask my parents what was going on. As I got closer to them, I saw that my dad was operating a hand cracked radio that they found. The radio was broadcasting some information about areas that were bombed and places that where “Green zones” (safe) and areas that where “Red Zones” (not safe from bomb threats). Before I could ask anybody what was happening, I felt vibrations then immediately after a couple loud explosions rammed my ear drums. A raid had started. </p>

<p>The duration of the night was spent in constant fear and terror. My parents had learned from the radio that Israeli warplanes were performing bombing raids for 5 to 10 minutes every hour in certain areas of Lebanon. There wouldn't be 20 minutes without jet engine noises roaring in the sky past our building. For every airplane that had passed above us, we ducked our heads and prayed. The anticipation of what was going to happen next broke us all down mentally. Luckily for me, I slept before the second raid of bombs that happened, so I was not as worn down. </p>

<p>The next thing I remembered was my mom waking me up very early in the morning with my shoes in her hand saying “Put on your shoes, we’re leaving”. I had not fully understood what was happening before we were in the taxi on our escape to Syria.</p>

<p>Only you can write your conclusion since it is unapparent from your essay why you chose to tell it.</p>

<p>The prompts are:
-Evaluate a significant experience, achievement, risk you have taken, or ethical dilemma you have faced and its impact on you.
-Discuss some issue of personal, local, national, or international concern and its importance to you.
-Indicate a person who has had a significant influence on you, and describe that influence.
-A range of academic interests, personal perspectives, and life experiences adds much to the educational mix. Given your personal background, describe an experience that illustrates what you would bring to the diversity in a college community or an encounter that demonstrated the importance of diversity to you.
-Topic of your choice</p>

<p>Did you grow up in Lebanon and were living there when this happened, or were you visiting relatives over the summer? Maybe you could clarify that, or explain why you came to be in that situation.</p>

<p>1)A few grammer mistakes.
2)Try to do a better job to build the suspense
3)Jets are okay but leave out the Israeli’s as the antogonists. (Too controversial)
4)Escape in a Taxi-Really?</p>

<p>Thanks guys on the comments! :)</p>