Proofread my UChicago extended essay

<p>Can somebody proofread my essay?
I have terrible grammar, and I need general feedback with paragraphing, word choices...general stuff. </p>

<p>Thank you!</p>

<p>Send it homie</p>

<p>fo sho.... pm me</p>

<p>send itttt. i'll give constructive criticism</p>

<p>Yeah sure. Pm me</p>

<p>pm me too.</p>

<p>I can help you vet it.</p>

<p>I will! PM it to me.!</p>

<p>pm me!! love proofreading lol</p>