Proofread my Why Penn essay? :)

<p>I feel like it's rather stilted right now and doesn't convey everything I want to say coherently.</p>

<p>I would appreciate anyone who could give constructive feedback.</p>

<p>Thank you! :)</p>

<p>I can help! DM the statement if you would like!</p>

<p>I'm willing to read it.</p>

<p>sure, I can read it.</p>

<p>I can also read it </p>

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<p>I will! Just send it alone</p>

<p>^I PM'ed it to all four :D thank you so much!</p>

<p>I will. Could you proofread mine?</p>

<p>I'll read it if you'd like :)</p>

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<p>I can proofread it. Can you look over mine as well?</p>

<p>I was accepted ED to Penn! I will certainly read anyone's :)</p>

<p>I would love to read it :)</p>