PR's free SAT Writing Grading

<p>I just got my grade from PR’s free LiveGrader thing. I was wondering if you guys could read my essay and tell me how accurate their grade was. I got a 10 (out 0f 12) on the below…thing…if you could even call it an essay:</p>

<p>Prompt: When it comes to downloading music off the Internet, P. Diddy claims “when you make an illegal copy, you’re stealing from an artist.” U2’s Bono states that “bootlegs are fine if you’re making a few of them for your friends.” </p>

<p>Assignment: Are the notions of copyright and intellectual property relevant in today’s file-sharing environment? Is it right or wrong to download music off the web? Plan and type an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, studies, experience, or observations. (Ahem, a question. Are all prompts this stupid? Why are they quoting P. Diddy rather than the CEO or President of a recording company?)</p>

<p>I agree with P. Diddy in his claim that, “When you make an illegal copy, you’re stealing from an artist,” and this is relevant to notions of copyright and intellectual property. The validity of this claim is apparent through a basic understanding of copyright laws, the equivalence of intellectual property and physical property, and the loss of profits wrongly incurred by artists.</p>

<p>First of all, notions of copyright are indeed relevant in today’s file sharing environment in that file sharing is going exactly against the ideas behind copyright: work is being traded without the consent or knowledge of the owner. This is perhaps best shown by the recent court rulings regarding users of “peer-to-peer” software programs, or programs that allow users to trade information directly via the internet. Just recently, it was ruled that the government take steps to stop the trading of music on the internet, the basis behind this ruling being that the music is the property of the creating atist. Unfortunately, however, the efforts were not pragmatic or effective and music sharing continues to be rampant.</p>

<p>Secondly, it is clear that he use of both intellectual property and physical property should remain under the jurisdiction of the creator or owner. Intellectual property, like physical property, would have had to been created by the hard work and sweat of another person, and stealing one’s intellectual acheivements is, in a way, disrespecting the efforts of that person. Thus, the theft of intellectual property and physical property are fairly equivalent, and since there is no question as to the wrongness of stealing physical property, intellectual property should be regarded as such as well.</p>

<p>Finally, artists are continually losing profits due to listeners downloading or illegally trading music. To illustrate with a hypothetical example, consider that artists only manage to sell one copy of an album before it is copied over and over again and shared around the world. Obviously, here, the author would have to quit his or her line of work, thereby removing a signficant source of culture from society and most likely disturibing his or her own lifestyle. Clearly, since all of this would have been created by file sharing, sharing music is wrong since it damages artists and society as a whole.</p>

<p>In conclusion, the reasons why notions of copyright and intellectual property apply to the issue of file sharing are clear, and this in turn proves that sharing music is also wrong, as is illustrated by the examples of the equivalence of physical and intellecutal property and the loss of profits that artists are continually facing.</p>

<p>bump plz??</p>

<p>[oops, I thought you were asking for advice, sorry.]</p>

<p>It demonstrates a competent level of writing. This can certainly improve, but you are at no risk of getting a /bad/ score.</p>

<p>Here are a few suggestions (for now):</p>

<p>Don’t cast doubt on your argument with phrases like “most likely” and “fairly”.</p>

<p>The essay is not persuasive enough. You need to address the opposing points directly. How do you account for “fair use”? How does the bootlegging of concerts play in the debate? What do you think of digital right management (copy protection)-- with copyrights that never expire and music that cannot be copied to new mediums, won’t we lose our culture? How do you account for the increase in sales from those who sample a single song and then buy the album? You do not mention the positive, less ambiguously legitimate uses of filesharing software (for example: “swarming” a critical update to Windows that could theoretically prevent millions of dollars in losses to businesses worldwide).</p>

<p>I realize that it’s unlikely many students are well versed in these topics, so I don’t blame you for their lack of inclusion, but you should consider reading the news the week before your test for some real life examples. You can apply what you’ve read to just about any topic they throw at you. I wrote about violation of civil liberties, a topic that happened to be big the week of the test. . . the same approach has worked for others I know.</p>

<p>Now, briefly, I know this is a non-issue, but you have some facts wrong:
“…this is perhaps best shown by the recent court rulings regarding users of “peer-to-peer” software programs, or programs that allow users to trade information directly via the internet.”</p>

<p>No court has ever ruled against any user of filesharing software. Every case has been settled out of court. Cases have been brought against the authors of such programs, with mixed results. For more information, visit the <a href=“http://www.eff.org%5B/url%5D”>www.eff.org</a> . . . that is, if you care.</p>

<p>You should tighten up your style. Avoid complex sentence structures unless you are confident that every clause is relevant. Also, try not to use colloquial language like “just recently” and “X is going to Y”.</p>

<p>In general, one should avoid subjective arguments unless one is dealing with morals (which are difficult to consider in such a small space).</p>

<p>Ahh I was referring to the whole peer-to-peer crackdown that happened 1 or 2 years ago. I forgot the acronym so I just called it court rulings. Thanks for the help! </p>

<p>What grade should I have gotten though? I don’t think I deserve a 10. Also, are all the topics this stupid? Why was P. DIDDY quoted?!</p>

<p>I’m not sure what grade you deserve. I hate to be so blunt, but I don’t think a 10 was merited. Then again, I don’t know the system very well (I was never told my subscore).</p>

<p>P.Diddy is an outspoken member of the professional music community. Also, Princeton Review probably thinks that students are more responsive to popular culture than politics. What I find surprising is that The Grateful Dead, the long time king of bootlegs (see <a href=“http://www.archive.org%5B/url%5D”>www.archive.org</a> for hundreds of concerts in lossless format), were not brought into this. Even more significant are the Beastie Boys who have released several works into the public domain under the Creative Commons license. Their music still sucks, in my opinion, but it was a noble move.</p>

<p>This would probably be a 9 or 10.</p>

<p>Thanks Godot.</p>

<p>Random update you may or may not be interested in: your essay’s “facts” became legitimate yesterday . . . it seems that the MPAA (movies, not music) has taken a fierce stand against BitTorrent tracker websites. Right now, nobody knows what’s going on. It’s being reported that the filesharing community is in total disarray. Most believe that a wave of cease and desist letters went out. The next logical step is lawsuits.</p>

<p>Is this a typical topic? I’ve seen a few essay prompts before and they all seem to have been said by a philosopher or psychologist with insights into the human mind.</p>