<p>I got in a fight in my freshman year, and I am writing a short essay explaining the incident and what I learned from it. As I was writing, I thought quoting the exact verbal threat given by the person that I got in a fight with would portray the level of bullying that I was in accurately, but it contains language and swearing. Although I censored it out using !@#s and appologized about the language prior to the quoting, I thought it might be offensive to the readers. Soo… what are your thoughts? Should I keep the quote or leave it out and simply state “verbal threat”?</p>
<p>I’d suggest you move to a different topic. Think about the purpose of this essay. Is it to show you’ve been bullied, or is it to show something more positive? I seriously don’t think adcoms are all that interested in reading a story about how you’ve been bullied. Save that for another time, but not for college admissions.</p>
<p>This is just a supplemental essay that I need to submit to describe the incident and what I learned from it, not the two big 250 and 500 word essays. Since there is no word limit, I wanted to elaborate on my situation - hmm… so should I keep less on what happened?</p>
<p>What is the actual prompt? I think you’d be much better off by staying clear from something that makes you look bad or having to feel you were in a compromising situation. </p>
<p>It sounds like something where they ask, “What’s one difficulty you have at work?” and a better answer is ‘that you care too much’, and not something like “You don’t get along with your boss.” See what I mean?</p>
<p>there was no prompt, but for the writing section, I had to check a box that states "Have you ever been found responsible for a disciplinary violation at any educational institution you have attended from the 9th grade (or the international equivalent) forward, whether related to academic misconduct or behavioral misconduct, that resulted in your probation, suspension, removal, dismissal, or expulsion from the institution? "</p>
<p>and I need to upload a letter that gives the approximate date of each incident, explains the circumstances, and reflects on what I learned from the experience. </p>
<p>since I was a victim of racism and bullying that eventually led to the fight, I thought it would be better to portray the exact situation that I was in by painting a picture. This will be verified with a counsellor statement, so I wanted to be as honest as possible to let the admissions people know that I’m nowhere close to violence.</p>
<p>You got into a fight, but did the school suspend you? Were you on probation? I’m guessing you’re over-sharing. This is where kids who got into trouble, by being suspended or expelled have to explain what happened. </p>
<p>This section is not one you want to fill out if you don’t have to. If you did get suspended, then yes, you have to explain what happened and what you learned. But if the school didn’t take “extra” steps to remove you, then you probably don’t have to say anything.</p>
<p>Even if you didn’t start the fight, it’s not likely you’ll look “good”. I would suggest you speak to your GC about this, before you paint a negative picture of what happened.</p>
<p>I greatly appreciate your advice. My school system has no tolerance policy, but the assistant principal who was in charge at that time understood my situation, and only gave me two days of suspension when fighting was an automatic ten. Two day suspension does not exist for our “yellow page” conduct violations, but it did get listed on my conduct page. Unfortunately, I already spoke to my GC, and based on my trials so far, I don’t think I can get it off of my record 
she simply mentions that it wouldn’t have any effect on the admission process as long as I don’t lie and my letter and councelor statement match up. hmm… should I go and ask her if she can remove it off of my record, backing with the fact that two day suspension for fighting does not exist on the code of conducts??</p>