random essay .. please look into it! thankyou :)

A REVIEW ON THE THOUSAND SPLENDID SUNS
I recently read an award winning book named “ THE THOUSAND SPLENDID SUNS” by Khaled Hosseini, and there is only one comment that ran through my mind as I finished the book: “this is reality”. Being a book based of reality, “The Thousand Splendid Suns” is one of the most pragmatic and marvelous books that has been able to portray the society in a true demeanor. The book not just triggers the ambivalent emotions of people towards life but also gives an idea about what the world faces while we are enjoying our days covered up in the gifts of life.
The events of the book dates back to the 20th century in a small village of the middle east named Kabul, Afghanistan. However, it doesn’t seem to be known as such back then. With a series of wars and forceful boundaries for women, the story basis itself around the lives of two women named Mariam and Laila. The story starts off with the thoughts of a young girl, Mariam, who lives in an even smaller village of Kabul. She is the daughter of a woman who was once a maid in one of the richest person in their area, Jalil Khan. However, because of being an unwanted or an accidental child she is forced to live away from Jalil Khan with her mother in a tattered house. But only because of the love she possesses for Jalil Khan she runs away from home to meet him because of which her mother suicide to keep her an orphan for life.
With her mother passed away, even at the age of 15 she is forced to marry an old 40-year old man named Rasheed who gives her life’s misery but then unknowingly makes her the hero at the end of the story. Because of the bombings taking place in their village, her neighbor child, Laila, loose her parents and as a result end up living with Mariam and Rasheed in their tiny house. Through a series of miscarriage, Mariam looses seven children. With frustration Rasheed coaxes the two ladies in order to marry Laila. With the marriage being done, Mariam is made the servant of the house while Laila is made his queen. However, with time Mariam and Laila lose their hatred for one another to become one and eventually get so tired of Rasheed’s dominance over them that they kill him instead.
In the process of all of these happenings, Laila gives birth to two babies, Aziza and Zalmai. Among these Aziza is not Rasheed’s child but that of Tariq who is Laila’s childhood love, and also a reason for her acceptance towards her marriage to Rasheed. With Rasheed being dead, Tariq coming back, Mariam and Laila’s closeness and the Taliban’s rule, Mariam assures Laila to live her youth while she stays rotten in jail and eventually faces a death sentence by being shot in the head.
Through a series misunderstandings and hindrances, these two women live a life together by fighting for their rights and rights of all women. Being born in a conservative society they don’t let the taboos keep them down but rather fight against them to ensure an environment of equality through their small ways. Although, one loose her life in this process the other lives on to ensure the dead’s rights to look at their success through her eyes. It is a story of hardships, problems, success and fights that will completely revive one’s mind towards the art and meaning of what we call life. It is a must read book which will live on for generations to come. The book undoubtedly encourages people to be glad for what they have because it expresses the need of people even for basic freedom.
Despite being written by a male writer, the book clearly voices itself for the rights of women. People say “ Don’t judge a book by its cover” but this particular novel has all of it, the cover of interest, the topic of interest but mainly the content of poignant happenings.

Hi! Honestly, i thnk u shud spicen up your essay!!felt really bored reading it! It has a strong theme but u shud work on the writing style!

hmm heyy
thankyou so much … this is a very new comment from what I used to get… maybe this is one of the reasons that my essays seem bland… thankyou once again. ill try my best to work on that :slight_smile:

**Lol, why are you writing a “random” book review?

This was a pretty good summary, but I don’t know if I’d call it a review. You don’t really comment on any part of the book except at the end. Isn’t a review supposed to be your opinion on the story, theme, writing style, etc.

Also, you need to do a little more fact-checking to make sure that what you’re writing is accurate. Some of the things you say aren’t true…**

A REVIEW OF "A THOUSAND SPLENDID SUNS**"**

I recently read an award-winning book named "A Thousand Splendid Suns” by Khaled Hosseini, and there was only one comment that ran through my mind as I finished the book: “This is reality”. Being a book based off of reality, “A Thousand Splendid Suns” is one of the most pragmatic and marvelous books that has been able to portray the society authentically. The book not just triggers the ambivalent emotions [What are “ambivalent emotions?”] of people towards life but also gives an idea about what people in other parts of the world face while we are enjoying our days covered up in the gifts of life [What does this mean?].

The events of the book date back to the 20th century [You say this like it’s a really long time ago, lol. According to Google, this is around the 1960s to early 2000s] in a small Middle Eastern village named Kabul, Afghanistan [Actually, Kabul is the capital of Afghanistan and it’s largest city… I think that the “small village” you’re referring to is actually within Kabul, but you need to find out its name.]. However, it doesn’t seem to be known as such back then [No, it was Kabul then too.]. Set during the time of a series of wars and the forceful oppression of women, the story bases itself around the lives of two women named Mariam and Laila. The story starts off with the thoughts of a young girl, Mariam, who lives in an even smaller village in Kabul [Which is called…]. She is the daughter of a woman who was once the maid of one of the richest people in the area, Jalil Khan. However, because Mariam was Jalil’s illegitimate child, she is forced to live away from him with her mother in a tattered house. But only because of the love she possesses for Jalil Khan**,** she runs away from home to meet him**. Because of this, her mother commits** suicide to keep her an orphan for life [Are you sure that was why she committed suicide, versus out of grief or for revenge?].

With her mother passed away, even at the age of 15**, Mariam** is forced to marry a 40-year old man named Rasheed**,** who makes her life miserable but then unknowingly makes her the hero at the end of the story [Why are you jumping to the end of the story before you even explained the middle?]. Because of the bombings taking place in their village, Mariam’s neighbor, a child named Laila, loses her parents**. As a result, she ends** up living with Mariam and Rasheed in their tiny house. Through a series of miscarriages, Mariam loses seven children. Out of frustration Rasheed coaxes [I don’t think that’s the right word…] the two ladies in order to marry Laila. With the marriage being done, Mariam is made the servant of the house while Laila is made his queen. However, with time**,** Mariam and Laila lose their hatred for one another to become one and eventually get so tired of Rasheed’s dominance over them that they kill him instead [Haha, firstly, it was only Mariam who killed Rasheed. Secondly, she didn’t plan do it because she was tired of him; it was a spur-of-the moment decision because he was about to kill Laila and she had no other option.].

In the process of all of these happenings, Laila gives birth to two babies, Aziza and Zalmai. Among these Aziza is not Rasheed’s child but that of Tariq**,** who is Laila’s childhood love, and also a reason for her acceptance towards her marriage to Rasheed [He wasn’t the reason why Laila married Rashid… She was lied to.]. With Rasheed being dead, Tariq coming back, Mariam and Laila’s closeness and the Taliban’s rule, Mariam urges Laila to live her life while she stays rotten in jail and is eventually executed by being shot in the head. [Okay, there are a couple of problems with this part. 1. This is all out of order. You already talked about Rasheed being killed; if you’re telling the story in order, you can’t jump back to when Laila had her children. And you don’t mention Tariq when you first talk about Laila. 2. You don’t explain why Mariam ends up in jail.]

Through a series misunderstandings and hindrances, these two women spend their lives together fighting for their rights and rights of all women [They weren’t fighting for the rights of all women… And they weren’t really fighting for their own rights either. They were pretty much just trying to protect themselves from Rasheed.]. Being born in a conservative society**,** they don’t let the taboos keep them down but rather fight against them to ensure an environment of equality through their small ways. Although one loses her life in this process, the other lives on to ensure the dead’s rights to look at their success through her eyes [What?]. A Thousand Splendid Suns is a story of hardships, problems, success and fights that will completely revive one’s mind towards the art and meaning of what we call life. It is a must-read book that will live on for generations to come. The book undoubtedly encourages people to be glad for what they have because it expresses the need of people even for basic freedom [The way this is worded is confusing.].

Despite being written by a male writer, the book clearly advocates for the rights of women. People say “Don’t judge a book by its cover**,” but this particular novel has all of it:** the cover of interest [The book has multiple types of covers, and the saying doesn’t really apply if the cover is nice.] and the interesting topic, but mainly the content of poignant happenings [Weird wording].

haha this comment literally opens my eyes towards my writing. there is so much to work on. damn it!
but thankyou tons for this… i m very glad u helped me up alot… so much to work on though haha… ill try my best !