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Statement of Purpose

I would like to start this with an original life incident, in my 9 grade a visiting chemistry faculty to my school impressed which the way I solved a problem asked me what I want to become when I grow up. Without much of a delay I just said Chemical Engineer. Though I’m tagging myself to I used to feel I was meant for that mostly because it’s sheer chemistry. So I managed to get into a renowned and one the oldest Chemical Engineering departments in India. Then once I joined my engineering, I realized that the subject is not just some reactions that you do sitting in a laboratory and take a notes on, the beauty of the subject is that you tone a chemical reaction into a chemical technology which thereby result in a stably sustained commercial mass production process that helps society in many means.
Then after my graduation I joined as a project apprentice at Glaxo Smith Kline for an expansion project, that is the time when I learned how big you need to think to solve a problem. For an instance, you need to heat up the feed a few degrees you just think of a purge getting out and a heat exchanger always about efficient usage of resources but never about the cost. Later on I went to join as a Sr. Engineer if process control and quality assurance at Vesuvius India Ltd. Here my very first project was a part of disaster management project where I have to salvage 1900MT during which I have successfully converted a rotary kiln into a rotary drier with material keeping the parameters like angle of inclination, feed rate(inlet and outlet), drum temperature and RPM material specific. The project was well applauded barring that I learned structuralisation of a set up to user specific almost alone but many of my questions were left unanswered keeping in mind only the business requirements that was my first compromise which triggered an unrest inquisition in me. Soon I was promoted as a production incharge. This particular position have made me learn factors like how to contain a problem and administrate a huge man force and how to collect and interrupt a data. But more often than not at a bussiness hour you are not encouraged to experiment on a running and established system based on a few data and intuitions. But for me to make a challenging statement without making some hit and trails I lacked the expertise to establish small plotted pareto graphs to projects. I feel that being an engineer by profession it is in our gene to look at a thing and think about how to make it run better. So a feeling of incompleteness started coming back to be that somehow I was not fulfilling the role that I promised myself when I was young and dreamy of making a difference at college.I strongly believe that a for any process the integrity of its efficiency in all the forms starting from the resources utilization to cost to energy. This reminds me that during a national level fest conducted at NIT Warangal we were asked to design a heat exchanger with limited surface area and several other parameters like volume and any medium of our choice between the chambers where most people were going for metal powders starting from aluminium to copper I evaluated the costly and thought that the project is never justified if you can not govern the cost and this made me think and I ended up going with graphite powder which is both cost effective and better solution.

Industries today have more become market oriented in a fight for survival in which they were neglecting the most pivotal point of innovation and design which is making the engineers to work more on data than technicalities which want I don’t have my heart at. So I believe that Masters at xxxxx university will definitely help me in my pursuit of path of a better engineering, thereby opening a window of opportunities to embrace the pleasure of innovations empowering me with the technicalities that would make me on par with current days requisites and leading me to the area of interest in research at techniques of mass productions.

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Your word variety and sentence structure is poor.
Need to break up discrete thoughts into separate paragraphs.
Your thoughts are all over the place – I can’t follow half of what you are writing
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