Rate my essay on Failure, please.

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<p>Failure should be our teacher, not our under-taker. Failure is delay, not defeat. It is a temporary detour, not a dead end. Failure is something we can avoid only by saying nothing, doing nothing, and being nothing.
---------Dennis Waitley, Seeds of Greatness</p>

<p>Assignment: Is failure a temporary setback resulting from inaction or indifference? Plan and write an essay…</p>

<p>[My</a> essay](<a href=“ImageShack - Best place for all of your image hosting and image sharing needs”>ImageShack - Best place for all of your image hosting and image sharing needs).</p>

<p>Personally, I’m dubious about it because… well, I really couldn’t find any actual example from History or Literature to support my view, except for the pathetic one I wrote about Lord of the Rinds - not very convincing.</p>

<p>Still, any tips on improvement and on better examples would be appreciated.</p>

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<p>Intro is fine.
First body paragraph shows shallow thought. Does failure result from inaction or indifference? You never said.
Second body paragraph: Ditto. Doesn’t answer the question.
Your examples are fine, but you didn’t develop your argument well enough (not enough depth in thought) and you didn’t answer the question.</p>

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<p>Ah, thanks.</p>

<p>But I’m a little confused. The assignment is asking if failure results from inaction or indifference – but the quote states that failures are our teacher??</p>

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<p>I think it’s asking whether failures are temporary setbacks</p>

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<p>…resulting from inaction or indifference.</p>