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<p>Are people held back by their adherence to the beliefs of the majority or doing things in the conventional way?</p>

<p>-> “I reject, the choice i make is going my way.” This is one of the thoughts are in my head. I’m always the stubborn type of girl to believe my thoughts. Majority of people are like this as well; People only listen to advice they understand if they hear advice that they can’t correalate with, they’re bound to listen their instincts.
-> Take Ben from the show “Bacholor” as an example of listening to himself. He hosts a dating show testing twenty girls to be his fiance. Along the way, he meets a very controversial girl name Courtney. He holds an profound interest in her, but there are a lot of negative comments about her. Tabloids accuse her of playing Ben’s heart by her manipulative actions she does among the contestant. Outspoken women, like Emily and Ellen (a famous host) detest Courtney and advice Ben to heed from her. Through the critique about Courtney going like wildfire, Ben still picks her. Because he heeds good advice about Courtney, he now has relationship problems. He is given the best advice, but he ignores it and follows his heart.
-> People usually follow their heart and follow their happiness. They don’t want to follow advice they don’t agree with. Therefore people follow the advice of their own brain and hear, not the other people’s brain and heart.</p>

<p><em>sigh</em> okay i got to admit… this is my worst essay -___- i didn’t type in my other essays yet, but as might as well do this one… I RAN OUTTA TIME… Oh well…</p>

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<p>3</p>

<p>Good example, but you might want to pick an example that refers more to the “majority” as opposed to suggestions from a few people. Or you can use a real-life situation, such as the invention of the cotton gin (since this is “unconventional” compared to the manual way of removing seeds) or an example you’ve encountered in your life.</p>

<p>Also, I would check for grammar/spelling errors (“Bachelor” instead of “Bacholor”) and plan faster.</p>

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<p>2.</p>

<p>If I graded it out of 12, I would give it a range of 3-4.</p>

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<p>2 on a good day.</p>

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<p>well… i’ve been practicing essays for the SAT constantly… and i have to admit this is my worst one… </p>

<p>and i never have time to write my others… yah i’ll write my longer ones soon enough</p>

<p>thank you guys :D</p>

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<p>You do know that shows like The Bachelor are all finished filming before the first episode is even aired, right? Tabloids and magazines couldn’t influence his decision either way because she was already chosen.</p>

<p>Also, it’s best not to use reality TV as an example for any essay…ever.</p>

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<p>Thanks for the advice @saman42 xD… you comment on my threads a lot o__0 this is like the 3rd time i saw you hahaha xD</p>

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<p>Haha I know I just clicked on your profile and started reading your threads.</p>

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<p>… @saman42 wow okay xD</p>