Read 2nd draft of my CommonApp essay?

College Essays
#1

<p>1 or 2 people, post and I'll message it over. I'd prefer people out of high school, but any input would be great.</p>

#2

<p>I'm a pretty decent essay writer, I'll be able to give you some constructive feedback</p>

#3

<p>I can try to help you to the best I can ;)</p>

#4

<p>I'm an English major. If you're still looking for someone to read it over, send me a PM.</p>

#5

<p>I'm good at english. I'll help. PM me!</p>