Read and Review My Essay?

<p>I just got done with the first draft of my first college essay. Because it’s a first draft, and it’s the first of probably many I will write from here on out, I’m not sure if I’m going in the right direction or how to revise and edit my essay into perfection.</p>

<p>So would any kind experienced person like to volunteer to read and review my essay for me and let me know what I should do to improve it and whether or not I am going in the right direction?</p>

<p>Thanks in advance!</p>

<p>sure =) pm me</p>

<p>I’d be glad to be of assistance!</p>

<p>me tooo ;)</p>