Read my common app essay about a different kind of illness?

<p>I have good stats and decent ECs, but the essays are definitely the place where I will be the least competitive. I don’t think I have made too many grammatical errors, but could you please read it and give me suggestions to the flow / structure and overall idea of this essay? Does it answer the prompt?</p>

<p>Send it over.</p>

<p>I’d love to take a look at it. Could you send it to me?</p>

<p>I’m a professional proofreader, I’ll help out.</p>