Read my Essay for the University of Central Florida! HELLP!

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<p>I just finished this essay for the University of Central Florida. I need to answer two questions in one personal statement. I chose </p>

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The personal statement is a very important part of your application. It assists the university in knowing you as an individual, independent of test scores and other objective data. We ask that you respond to two of the topics below. Your personal statement should be no longer than 500 words or a total of 7000 characters for both statements (refer to character remaining counter below the essay). The best personal statements are not necessarily the longest ones.

1. If there has been some obstacle or “bump in the road,” in your academic or personal life, please explain the circumstances.
2. How has your family history, culture or environment influenced who you are?
3. Why did you choose to apply to UCF?
4. What qualities or unique characteristics do you possess that would allow you to contribute to the UCF community?

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<h2>I chose number 1 and number 4 which I combined into this 500 word essay. The problem is I DO NOT feel that it answers the questions well and the concluding paragraph, well, sucks. Any suggestions would be great thank you. </h2>

<p>PLease let me know so I can PM it to you</p>