Read My Essay? (Short)

<p>Applying to: Dartmouth, Cornell, Williams, Middlebury, Georgetown, WashU, Bates, Colgate, BC, Bucknell, Villanova, Lehigh and St. Lawrence.</p>

<p>I have heard that the first paragraph is a little bit boring but I was just wondering if there were any grammar mistakes (hanging modifiers…) and if you have any recommendations. </p>

<p>PM me (this is the common app one btw)</p>

<p>sure, pm me</p>