read my "Jeopardy introduction" essay?

<p>I wrote an essay based on the prompt “You are a contestant on Jeopardy!. It’s time for your introduction, in which you introduce yourself and tell a short, interesting story or factoid about your life. Here’s your chance to be famous: What story do you tell to millions of Jeopardy! viewers?” </p>

<p>Would anyone be willing to read my essay and give me some critiques on how to improve it?</p>

<p>sure. how do I open it from here?</p>