Read my personal statement?

Colleges & Universities University of California - Los Angeles
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<p>Hi, could someone give my any tips on my personal statement?</p>

<p><a href=“https://docs.google.com/document/d/1olYDbFzP8t_0fBjncllwY0e79BOPgcfn7Jj6whNSQ3E/edit?usp=sharing[/url]”>https://docs.google.com/document/d/1olYDbFzP8t_0fBjncllwY0e79BOPgcfn7Jj6whNSQ3E/edit?usp=sharing&lt;/a&gt;&lt;/p&gt;

<p>Feel free to edit too. </p>

<p>Thanks.</p>

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<p>I would advise against posting your essay so publicly before you’ve submitted it.</p>

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<p>I would strongly second Gunnnn’s advice.</p>

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<p>I like it. It has an emotional appeal and everything.</p>