Review My College Essay please?

<p>Prompt: "Describe the world you come from — for example, your family, community or school — and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations."</p>

<p>Help revise my essay answering the prompt please?</p>

<p>bump? it's for my UC app.</p>

<p>Sure, I'll do it! It sure beats working on my college essays :)</p>

<p>Just PM it to me, k?</p>

<p>Need other readers please.</p>

<p>i'll read it. pm to me</p>

<p>I'll read and critique.</p>

<p>Ill check it out</p>

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