Community Service: Explain what you have done to make your community a better place to live. Give examples of specific projects in which you have been involved over time
During the summer, I volunteered in a summer program for children of migrant families. I used to attend this as a child so I wanted to give back to my community and volunteer at it. I was a teacher’s assistant and my job was to focus on helping the kids that were struggling with English. I would sit with them one on one and help them improve their English. This contributed to making my community a better place, because I helped children from migrant families become more literate with English which is a necessary skill.
I agree, I would add “program” to the sentence “I used to attend this as a child so I wanted to give back to my community and volunteer at it.” So it would read “I used to attend this program as a child so I wanted to give back to my community and volunteer at it.” I would still fix the sentence up a bit as it still sounds awkward but at least it’s a tad bit better.
Last summer, I helped teach English to children of migrant farm workers. I attended this program as a child and it helped me so I decided to volunteer at it and give back to my community. I was a teacher’s assistant and my job was to help the kids that were struggling with English. I would sit with them one on one and help them improve their English. This contributed to making my community a better place, because I helped children from migrant families become more literate with English which is a necessary skill.
I deleted all those sentences because they gave redundant information. Plus they don’t really care about the details, more so on how you made the community a better place.