Revise my short NYU essay (penpalling website)

<p>Anyone want to revise my essay for NYU?
I Just wrote it and would like any edits and suggestions
its about a website that intrigues me</p>

<p>it's pretty short!</p>

<p>You can send it to me if you want. </p>

<p>And good luck with the rest of your application for NYU! :)</p>

<p>Sure if you still want help, i can take a look</p>