Risky admissions essay?

College Admissions
#1

<p>I'm writing in response to a Common App prompt, that goes like
"Evaluate a significant experience, achievement, risk you have taken, or ethical dilemma you have faced, and its impact on you"</p>

<p>It's a rough draft, and I know it could use a few revisions, but I wanna know if it's even worth it to consider editing, because the experience that I wrote about...well it can either really give me a boost, or set me back for the college I send it to.</p>

<p>Would anyone not mind reading it, through PM, and give me some feedback? Thanks!</p>

#2

<p>I'll read it if you like.</p>

#3

<p>I will read it to if you want some more readers.</p>

#4

<p>I'd love to read it!</p>

#5

<p>I will read it.</p>

#6

<p>I'd love to read it. :)</p>

#7

<p>I will read it!</p>

#8

<p>Well guys, I decided to scrap the essay. I decided it was just too risky, and I will focus on something a little more "safe" (but still good). Thanks for all the offers though :)</p>

#9

<p>I will say though. Risk is Okay. My U Michigan Essay was about how much I prefer Virginia. My UVa essays were about vanity license plates and Tom Waits. My William and Mary essay was about driving in DC at 3 in the morning. Those are all schools i was admitted into.<br>
My UPenn, WashU and Cornell essays were all very buttoned up. 'economics is my intended major. here is why. here is why i want to go to your school' And I was rejected. My mediumish GPA also contributed to those rejections(not the point). Some "risk" can make you unique. Don't lose all of it.</p>

#10

<p>Yay risks! PM me if you need another reader.</p>

<p>I used a risky personal statement for my Common App main knowing that it wouldn't work for some of the colleges I applied to. I only did it because it showed a side of me that I thought my top choice might like. I ended up getting accepted to that school and waitlisted/rejected by most of the others, so I guess all in all it was a good risk :)</p>