<p>In the “Scavenger Hunting for Wordy Phrases” section of Rocket Review, the following revision is given:</p>
<p>Original version: When students are late to school, they must check in at the principal’s office before going to class.</p>
<p>Revised version: When late to school, students must check in at the prinicipal’s office before going to class.</p>
<p>Reason: “Students” is implied in the opening phrase, so it’s unnecessary to repeat it.</p>
<p>Is the original version really incorrect? It seems fine to me and unlike the other obviously redundant examples on the page.</p>
<p>hey is rocket review good? is it better than like grubers, maximumsat, testmaster</p>
<p>Do you use the rocket review essay scorer? How is that? I don’t know the answer to your question btw. I don’t see anything wrong with the original version.</p>
<p>Yes and no. The reason he set out such extreme, nuanced examples is to get you into the right frame of mind. It’s extremely, extremely unlikely that would ever show up as an incorrect answer choice. However, a similar situation may arise, one that is less extreme, that requires this kind of thinking. Things like “the reason is because” would definitely be considered incorrect, although they’re not likely to show up in the original sentence, but rather as incorrect answer choices on Sentence Revision (I think that’s what it’s called) questions.</p>
<p>Thanks for the reply Godfatherbob. I know something exactly like that is unlikely to show up on the test, it just bothered me.</p>
<p>The RR essay scorer can only be used for like 4 essay questions that are programed into the scorer. It’s kind of pointless, you could type a load of off-topic BS and it will give you a good grade, as long as it’s a good length.</p>
<p>The revised version is simply more concise. “Students” and “they” are somewhat redundant and superfluous; only one of the two is needed.</p>