<p>“Personally experiencing the agony caused by the breakup of a family, I relive the moment when my mother lost her only son every time I witness a family fighting understanding that the pain of ceasing the love of family is the greatest pain.”</p>
<p>this is my opening sentence to my conclusion. I think there may be a problem when the sentence transitions from “i witness a family fighting” to “understand that…”
any constructive criticisms will be appreciated.</p>
<p>I would write it like this:
"After personally experiencing the agony caused by the breakup of a family, I relive the moment when my mother lost her only son every time I witness a family fighting because I understand that the pain of ceasing the love of family is the greatest pain.</p>
<p>thanks!
I was thinking that leaving the “after” out would make the sentence sound nicer but again thank you for the help!</p>
<p>Having personally experienced the agony of family breakup, I relive the moment when my mother lost her only son whenever I see a family … You will have to do the last half of the sentence because I can’t figure out what you mean.</p>