SAP appeal...Does this sound okay? Do you think ill get it?

<p>Okay, so if your ambitious and want to correct the grammar please do! I am horrible at it.
But does anyone thing this will be good enough? or see where I can put better wording?</p>

<p>Dear appeal board,
This letter is in response to my financial aid suspension. I am writing to present a request to have the privilege of receiving federal financial aid again. In the fall of 2012 I experienced a series of unfortunate events that prevented me from maintaining SAP standards. The domestic abuse in my relationship, loss of my pregnancy and my brothers potentially life threatening surgery, made it extremely difficult to keep up with attendance requirements and homework. I ended up dropping all of my classes due to the struggle I experienced with these matters.</p>

<p>I started living with my boyfriend at the end of the 2012 summer B. It was after I moved in with him that I quickly learned how truly terrifying my situation had become. He would often keep me up late at night and constantly distract me from school work. Whenever I did try and do school work around him he would sit next to me and try to critique my work or compete with me to see who could answer the questions on my homework first. I found it incredibly stressful to attempt school work with him around. I often tried to go to the library, the ARC for tutoring or a quite place to study but he refused to let me go. He felt I didn't need extra help and I was only trying to go to the library/ARC to flirt with other male students/tutors. This was only the tip of my issues with him. We frequently fought over small things and he would kick me out of the house or lock me out of our bedroom. I spent many nights driving around in my car, crying or sleeping on the couch and this would cause me to miss school in the mornings because he would keep my phone from me and keep me up all night fighting. The relationship became physically abusive very quickly. He would push me, grab me, kick me etc. I was afraid to tell anyone or seek help. He would always threaten to kill himself if I tried leaving him. I became a slave to his every desire because if I didn't it would result in fights or physical abuse. He made it impossible to study, do homework and get extra help at school. It was also the cause of my alienation from family, friends and the general public. </p>

<p>Also, in the start of the 2012 fall semester, I learned that my physically disabled brother,(name here), was booked to undergo a dangerous and potentially life threatening back surgery. The surgery was to correct the curvature in his spine as a result of his constant muscle spasticity. My family knew the surgery had the potential to end his life but my brother was always in constant pain and this was his last resort for relief. Knowing that he was going to be going through this surgery I spent as much time as I could with him and my family. I found it extremely important to spend time with him and grow new memories encase the worst case scenario became a reality. The day of the surgery I stayed in the hospital for the entire 8 hours and then waited until we could visit him. He made it out of the surgery alive. The next two weeks were the next biggest hurdle, getting him off the ventilator and breathing on his own. I was always making phone calls and watching for text messages. I frequently traveled from Bradenton to All Childrens in St. Pete to visit with him and encourage him in his recovery. This traveling back and forth tremendously cut out my time for school work and classes. The emotional stress and constant worry made it hard to focus on class lectures and keeping myself engaged. </p>

<p>The most of heartbreaking would have had to be the loss of my pregnancy. I discovered in the middle of August that I was pregnant. This would be my first baby and I have never been sicker in my life. I threw up every morning from morning sickness. I couldn't eat, sleep, or keep fluids down. The morning time was the worst. My first class in the fall semester of 2012 began around 9am. I found that with the morning sickness, late nights fighting, and endless homework, it was just physically impossible to make it to my morning class. Resulting in me falling behind in my class work and not following attendance policies. I went to an appointment at planned parenthood in order to discuss adoption and other parental options. This is when I learned I had a "Blighted Ovum." Its the gestational sack with no actual baby inside. I then agreed to proceed with an abortion of the pregnancy because I was told the pregnancy would ultimately result in a miscarriage anyways and having the abortion would end my pregnancy symptoms within two days. Sadly, a few weeks after the pregnancy I learned that I could have kept the pregnancy and waited until I was further along and had another ultrasound to be absolutely sure the pregnancy wasn't viable. The chances of the ultrasound being wrong was a possibility considering I was still very early in the pregnancy. This discovery lead to a very deep depression for me. I felt like planned parenthood misinformed me and did not tell me everything I needed to know in order to make a solid choice. I felt miserable and regretful for a very long time afterwards. I couldn't get over the fact that I may have potentially ended a good pregnancy. This, on top of everything else, really made day to day life a struggle to keep up with. </p>

<p>All of this, however, taught me a very valuable lesson about standing up for myself and my goals. I now have more drive and determination than ever to prove I can make myself something out of all the mess I come from.In order to maintain SAP standards, this time, I will make sure I schedule classes later in the day so mornings are not an issue. I will start off slowly. I would like to attend the summer, part time, in order to reacquaint myself with the norms of college life and studying. This time I am living at home so the chances for distraction such as relationships and other negativities are very unlikely. I dont have any distractions at this point that would cause me to run into this same situation nor do I plan on ever getting into a similar situation again. I have also taken the steps of getting on birth control so no unplanned pregnancies can be a distraction to my schooling and self progress. </p>

<p>I do hope that it can be seen I have made a huge step in the right direction and have taken steps to prevent a repeat of fall 2012. I am surely ready to take this chance to receive federal financial aid, if given the chance and prove I am a strong, confident and ambitious young woman who is finally in a position to take the next step in life and get a serious education. I am without a doubt sure that the steps I have planned out for myself will allow me to succeed in the coming semesters and get me right back to SAP standards. Thank you so much for your time and most importantly your consideration. </p>

<p>Sincerly, </p>

<p>xxxxxx xxxxx xxxxx</p>

<p>I strongly recommend that you edit this letter immediately to remove any personally identifiable information, most specifically your name at the end.</p>

<p>I edited it ;)</p>