Hey CC buds,
This is just like other typical SAT threads…
I am practicing my essays for SAT Writing and so I wrote a practice essay in 45 - 50 mins…
Inspired by a Barrons’ sample essay, I have written this…
Pre Script - I am fully acquainted with SAT. Gave one on June 2016(The Controversial Test >:) ) …got an 8 and want to improve.
Please proofread the following essay and give some tips to improve it… Thank You
Prompt - Is conscience more powerful motivator than money, fame, or power?
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Conscience is a more powerful motivator than money, fame or power. only with self realization can one introspect his or her own potentials and values that makes life decisions. In both literature and business put conscience plays a vital role in shaping our lives.
In Henry Ibsens’ renowned play “The Doll’s House”, the protagonist. Nora, is influenced with her delectable conscience that makes Nora aware of her own married life. Torvald, Nora’s husband , bounded Nora to their children’s responsibilities while continuing her job. Despite her stressful routine, she was never respected by Torvald. When once the couple argued on family’s financial issues, Torvald again debased Nora for the place she holds in family. Having heard enough, Nora realizes that deserves to live a respectable life; hence, she leaves her husband’s house and sets alone for a new life.
The most dominating businesses also arises when their leader’s realized their potentials to make wonders despite the setbacks. Clessic Cummins is the founder of " The Cummins" - the world’s first company to use diesel in automobiles and make those machines fast and efficient. “The Cummins”, initially, only made diesel powered steam engines to water farms. Unfortunately, that business didn’t turn out lucrative and the company was in depression. Not giving up, Cummin’s conscience urged him to focus ,apart from farm machines, on automobiles engines. Using diesel in cars, made cars relatively faster, which increaded the demands of Cummin’s automobiles to myriad extent, bringing " The Cummins" from depression to domination.
The steps that Nora and Cummin took show that it is conscience that motivates a person to define its value and potential. Granted that there are other sources of motivation, as literary and business works exemplify, conscience is indeed a powerful motivator.
- Akshat S.