SAT Online Course, rated my essay as a 12, what do you think?

<p>In a world, plagued with the horrors of war, poverty, famine and disease, creativity is one way many are able to express their anguish and desires. Whether it be through art, literature, film, music or other forms, Creativity is omnipresent. Three examples that exemplify this are: Picasso’s “Guernica”, “The Gulag Archipelago” by Solzhenitsyn and Michael Moore’s film “Bowling for Columbine”. </p>

<p>“Guernica” is considered to be one of Pablo Picasso’s most well-known and valuable paintings. It was painted in the late 1940s, during the time of the Spainish Civil War and the reign of fascist dictator, Franz Franco. In the painting, Picasso, uses many symbols to express the atrocities of war. People are depicted as being stabbed and brutally murdered. In one section of the painting, Picasso uses a lightbulb in order to symbolize hope. “Guernica” continues to be a symbol of anti-war protest. After its creation, it toured all throughout Europe and America during WWII. Picasso used creativity as a method of protest, during the opressive regime, and war that plagued Spain during the 1940s. </p>

<p>“The Gulag Archipelago” was written by Alexander Solzhenitsyn, in it he adresses the monstrocites that occured during the reign of Stalin during the mid-19th century. He exposes the horrors of the labor camps, in which many Russians were forced to labor under detestable conditions, rank with pestiliance. When Solzhenitsyn tried to get it published in Russia, no one would. So, he went to the U.S. to get it published. It was immensely popular and remains an important Cold War artifact. Solzhenitsyn, used “The Gulag Archipelago” to vent his frustrations with the U.S.S.R. and the cruel and unusual methods that were implemented in Stalinist Russia. Thus, his creativty exposed the world, to something that they might not have realized the magnitude of this issue, without the publication of the novel. </p>

<p>Michael Moore, a popular American filmaker, is known to create throught-provoking, expositiory films. One of his most famous films “Bowling for Columbine” exposes America’s folly in its gun policy regarding youths and people in general and juxtaposes America’s violent culture with other various cultures, such as Japan and Canada. Another main focus of the documentry, is the Columbine shooting. The columbine shooting, involved two students going on a killing spree in their Colorado high school. In the movie, Moore and one of the kids that was paralyzed from the incident are able to get Kmart, the place where the shooters bought the bullets, to stop selling bullets. This is very powerful, and illustrates that maybe hope is not lost, and that America can reform its violent ways. Michael Moore uses film as his creative outlet, in order to inspire, educate and expose people to pertinent issues that affect our daily lives. </p>

<p>A world without creativity, would not be able to exsist. The world, would not be able to last because there would be nothing to inspire or educate people. Thus, life would becoming uniform and meaningless. Creativity allows one to create their own self and seperate themselves from others. Thus, creativity is essential to the well-being and preservation of man-kind.</p>

<p>Yep looks like a 12</p>

<p>You have 3 examples and you developed your argument well, good conclusion, would say it hits the 12</p>

<p>Did you write all that in 25 minutes?</p>

<p>Are you just showing off?</p>

<p>Did you write that in 25 minutes? It is far too long and would never fit in the 2 pages given to you for your SAT essay. And even if it fit, I am skeptical about whether anyone could write it all out in that amount of time.</p>

<p>It’s 514 words, 2500+ letters, that’s pretty long. However it has at least a dozen of spelling mistakes and sentence-structure errors. Sorry, but I doubt the credibility.</p>

<p>I really did write it in 25 minutes. I am good at writing long essays in short periods of time. There are many spelling mistakes and sentence structures because I wrote it so quickly. I think it was my examples that really helped the score. Also, why would I cheat? I would want it to be as accurate as possible.</p>

<p>Did you write it by hand, or type it? And did you fit it in the 2-page box?</p>

<p>Take out that first comma.</p>

<p>I typed it. Amb3r, it would probably be too long for the actual exam. It did fit into the online course box.</p>

<p>Personally, I type probably at least twice as fast as I can write by hand. In the future, I think you should do practice essays by hand unless you’re just training yourself content-wise. It’s believable that you can write a 514 word essay in 25 minutes if you type, and I think that essay is on 12-level. I remember using an online SAT essay grader too. I kept getting 12s, so I decided that for one essay prompt, I would submit my response from <em>another</em> essay prompt. Can you guess what I got? Yep, a 12 again. Basically, I guess the grader checks for the level of your vocab, any grammatical mistakes, and perhaps a few key words or something like that, so I wouldn’t trust it completely for content.</p>

<p>The online grader normally gave me 12’s. Yet I took my SAT for the 1st time in Oct and I got 9. The time constraint was horrible. I didn’t have time to write the conclusion.</p>

<p>I have the impression that the Online Course gives a 12 to every essay longer than 360-370 words in case it is not packed with mistakes. I do not think it even judges level of vocabulary. I submitted an essay of 350 words (free from mistakes) and got a 10. On another essay of 420 it gave me a 12 although I had grammar and vocab errors in it. Thus, I wonder whether the score is realistic at all. On the 6th practice test (which they have already administered) I read the sample hand-written essay (score 6) just to get an impression of what a student can actually right by hand in 25 minutes. He had filled the first page and a half from the second (300-350 words). Obviously, the real SAT essay scorers do not mind a shorter essay with correct grammar (I cannot say that the vocabulary was all impressive; the essay just sounded naturally :)</p>

<p>You definitely have some misplaced commas in there.</p>

<p>Oh, and don’t say “thus” twice in the last paragraph.</p>

<p>Meh. The first two sentences in the second paragraph could probably be combined into one, i.e.:</p>

<p>“Guernica”, painted during the late 1940s in Franco-controlled Spain, is one of Pablo Picasso’s most well-knowned paintings.</p>

<p>Also, re-word the first part of the first sentence of the third paragraph. It should be more like:</p>

<p>“The Gulag Archipelago”, written by Alexzander Sohzelhyme, addresses the many atrocious event that came of Stalin’s dictatorship.</p>

<p>All in all, your essay is quite wordy. It could probably be cut down to less than 400 words.</p>

<p>But if you really did write that in 25 minutes, heck, If I was a SAT grader, I would have to give you a 10 at least, just because of the exceptional length.</p>

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<p>Ugh, I know! I was only able to fill one and a half pages because I’m kind of a slow writer … hehe … oh well. I ended up with a 10.</p>