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<p>Please help grade my essays and provide your honest opinion.</p>

<p>Prompt: Do close doors make us creative?</p>

<pre><code> ‘Necessity is the mother of invention’. Closed doors are the lack of opportunities and the limit in resources. Although the more there are open doors, the more we get access to the insides; to be creative is to benefit from the iota of opened doors.

‘Genius is one percent inspiration, ninety nine percent perspiration’. Without the one percent of inspiration, we can not say closed doors make all people creative. An example of the hundred percent genius ingredients is Frederick Douglass’s early life. Douglass had opened doors, provided by his mistress Ms. Auld, as equal as those of any other infant. Having shut these doors, Ms. Auld was conquered by her consort’s malign insinuations to mistreat Frederick. Not ceding to what seemed impossible to obviate, Douglass, after been taught reading and writing by his his mistress before her conscience’s mutation, nourished himself with intellectual nutrition by trading his own food which was mostly bread, with books with other children of his neighborhood. He was creative in discovering his path and pursuing it and became the initiator of the process of fighting against slavery for freedom.

Another example of creativity against bolted doors was Robinson Crusoe’s life in a deserted island. IN the great, inspiring novel “Robinson Crusoe” composed by ‘Daniel Defoe’, Crusoe defied his parents for the love of going abroad to sea. As he met several liabilities, or better classified as assiduous onuses and dints, in discovering the world, Crusoe had not a door but a portal slammed shut in his face, catapulting him to the primitive age, of course with some handy tools and equipment along with the debris of the ship he was aboard, casted away to a plaintive, barren island. We believe that not many people are as survivals as Robinson Crusoe in his his situation, for he was an inventor, an engineer, a planter, a peasant, a shepherd, an explorer, a hunter and fisher; he was also a healer, for he used tobacco to ameliorate himself in his once sick condition, but it did not really help. He concaved the disadvantages and coined them to his own benefits.

In conclusion, closed doors do make us creative; they are the dire waves that push us to the shore and the calorific fire stalks that kindle our way through the murk. Only survivals can surpass drowning and shun burning.
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<p>Note: I wrote this essay in 25 minutes. :^o (27 mins.)</p>

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<p>I don’t understand the prompt or your first two paragraphs. The last two paragraphs are too focused on writing style and vocab and not enough on analysis. Also, I’m going to assume english is not your first language because a lot of your word choices just don’t work. Either way, try to keep it simpler and focus more on why your claim is right by supporting it with specific examples rather than “SAT words”.</p>

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<p>Wasn’t encouraged much with your speech, but it is true, for english is not my first language and i have been recently studying a lot of SAT words that jumbled my mind. As for the prompt, it was written as the question above and the passage preceding it is written below. thank you. :)</p>

<p>[ Many people believe that “closed doors make us creative.” These people argue that obstacles and restrictions are necessary, for without them we would never be forced to come up with new solutions. But “closed doors,” either in the form of specific obstacles or a lack of opportunities, often prevent people from reaching their full creative potential.] </p>

<p>Note: You did not grade my essay and did not mention some of the misused vocabulary. /:slight_smile: </p>