Score Essay Please!! 2200 goal.Test this saturday

<p>Prompt:Should people take more responsibility for solving problems that affect their communities or the nation in general?</p>

<p>Essay: In society today a plethora of civilians have the presupposition that the government should always assist the people, while others have the notion that individuals should be the only factor in altering their community. Although the government does righteously help many citizens, this is a path that will lead our nation away from prosperity. Too much help can turn humanity into a lethargic society. The movement of Eritrea fighting for autonomy, the novel “Gifted Hands”, and a current healthcare act called ObamaCare all illustrate that society should be more responsible for their problems.</p>

<p>In the 1970s a war broke out between the Eritreans and Ethiopians; the war was about Eritrean citizens wanting freedom from the tyrant nation Ethiopia. During the war, Ethiopian minutemen soldiers would run into Eritrean schools and massacre the children. It was through the Eritreans hard work and tenacity that allowed them to strive for freedom. Even though the war lasted for 30 years, the Eritreans kept pushing and did not grieve or ask for help. This illustrates the ability of Eritrea responsibility for their own problems.</p>

<p>In the book, “Gifted Hands”, based on a true story, an African-American named Ben Carson grew up in the ghetto city Detroit. Violence was always the key in this prodigious city, but Ben Carson did not follow that path. In fact Ben Carson became the world renowned neurosurgeon that succeeded in the first craniopagus, separation of two conjoined twins by the head. It was his consistent drive that allowed him to achieve success. Through his mindset of taking responsibility, Ben Carson was allowed to be the prolific neurosurgeon he was completing over 365 surgeries a year. </p>

<p>In current news, a healthcare act called ObamaCare has been set in placed. It has allowed free healthcare to patients who have had a pre-existing disease or injury before the previous healthcare act. This bill has eluded to many citizens that they can obtain free healthcare without working hard. With this healthcare act in place, the GDP of the USA will decline tremendously. This is allowing the government to spend money we do not have. This devoid of incentive from the citizens will destroy our nation with large debts. If these Americans took responsibility, then we would not need large healthcare acts that could deteriorate our nation.</p>

<p>Civilians should be more cautious about their responsibilities. This lack of responsibility mindset will hinder our nation and impede our natural growth and stop us from reaching our zenith. The war between Eritrea and Ethiopia, the book “Gifted Hands”, and the new healthcare act all demonstrate the need for incentive in citizens.</p>

<p>Comments: Please give me a score out of 12. Also, give me pros and cons. I need help. MY test is this Saturday.</p>