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<p>Topic: Best way of communication.</p>

<p>To send electronic mails is the best form to communicate with other peoples. Several examples from social sciences and current events prove that sending e-mails is impeccable kind of reporting or questioning the information.</p>

<p>The Research made by The Social Science Department, gives reasons and advantages why connecting people via e-mails is better than via phones. First advantage is that you can send emails in anytime you want. Second, because, in case of urgency, to say important information you don’t need to wait until phone line will be free. Third, archives of phone companies state that phone lines are more likely to get damaged than internet, it interprets that if internet connection is failed you can easily connect with another, but if phone line isn’t working, you need to wait one-two days until it will be fixed. This retardation could thwart important processes of negotiations between people. Thus, the Research made by the Social Science Department (SSD) proves that the communicating though emails is the ideal way to be in touch with other people.</p>

<pre><code>The case at “Maxwell & Max Tom Co.” represents Social Science Department’s pattern in use. The director and his employers were carrying bargains with other companies. This company was preparing for remarkable disclosing of new bridge they have built. It was stormy night before that event; consequently phone line was damaged and that’s why M&MT Co. couldn’t be in touch with other contractors, and company postponed the ceremony. Thus, the case in “Maxwell & Max Tom Co.” confirms that phone connecting has got significant disadvantages in case of urgency.
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<p>If phone lines are damaged or unavailable, there could be more serious consequences than delayed ceremony. For example, in case of natural disaster, like earthquake and tsunami, the phone lines because of being too busy, fail. This happens because people in such cases are calling to their families, friends, or relatives in one time; and phone lines are not constructed to stand that over that many calls. Instead of phone calls, we can use messages and emails. Hence, this instance exemplifies that messages and emails are more reliable than phone calls.</p>

<p>After careful analysis of the Research made by the Social Science Department, the case in “Maxwell & Max Tom Co.”, and an emergency case, one could see that electronic mails, indeed, are the perfect way of communicating with other people.</p>

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<p>anyone! please! my exam is upcoming!!!</p>

<p>Topic: Should we spend more time outdoors?</p>

<p>People should spend more time outdoors. Several examples from the social science, medical research, and my own life experience, prove that being outdoors two-three hours a day is crucial to the health and life success.</p>

<p>According to the Social Science Research 2008, modern people are very busy: one has a job, one has a school, and one has obligations. There’re times when people got to work overtime. As an example, let us consider a student prepares for the exam. In this case, a student realizes a momentous importance of this event, and lefts his mundane life behind him. According to this research, students like that one, need to spend more time outdoors because they must have some time when they are in solitary: no books, no problems, no obligations—only fresh air that helps to relax and gain aplomb, confidence under pressure. Therefore, the Social Science Research gives the reasons why we need to spend more time outdoors.</p>

<p>Similarly to the Social Science Research 2008, the Medical one also suggests to spend more time outdoors. But in this case, the medical research was made by doctors and, therefore, gives its reasons from medical approach. As many people know from their Biology classes in the school, the trees are producing oxygen 02 that is crucial to humans’ health because it affects brain’s productivity. Hence, why we need to spend more time outdoors? Because of trees producing oxygen 02; why we need oxygen? Because it positively affects humans’ brain. </p>

<p>My elder brother’s failure during his preparation for final exams in his school exemplifies both researches’ pattern in use. Joseph, my elder brother, was finishing his last year in the school. Like example in Social Science Research, Joseph left his mundane life behind him. He was studying whole day. And finally, there was one practice test to do. So he started doing it, but his every question was wrong. I suggested him to walk round the house. My advice was right. Joseph successfully done his last practice test and aced his school exams. Therefore, this example advice to spend more time outdoors because of reasons presented in both researches.</p>

<h2>After careful analysis of Social Science Research 2008, Medical Research, and story from my own life experience, one could see that we should spend more time outdoors, indeed. </h2>

<p>Many grammar errors 8-9</p>

<p>For example?</p>

<p>And also AH method is good except for intro. You need to lead into it not just bluntly state it.</p>

<p>Errors: One has a school
People got to work overtime
Stop using that one
the trees are producing, doesnt match tense with rest of essay
Like example</p>

<p>I don’t think so.</p>

<p>id give it a 4/12</p>

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No comment.</p>

<p>I’d give it a 7/12. Too shallow and short. Vocab is used incorrectly, if used at all.</p>

<p>“It’s very encouraging to know that someone envies you” – Russian writer(19 century)</p>

<p>^Just so you know, it’s envy+object; “envy” does not require a preposition.</p>

<p>So, “Bob envies Jane” is correct while “Bob envies to Jane” is incorrect.</p>

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So, what score you’d give?</p>

<p>Since you probably didn’t read my message, I’ll tell you here. This is NOT a 12/12, and will require much more work to bring it up to that level. Your examples are too superficial, because they have almost zero analysis behind them, and they are examples that everyone could think of. If you want a 12, you need an example that can stand out (or several). Your vocabulary is also very basic, and the few hard vocab that you throw in here instead stands out. Don’t throw in random vocab, either fill your essay up with them or ignore it completely. Your conclusion is also very average. It doesn’t make a lasting impression on the reader, and if you want that score, you need to make a lasting, good impression.</p>

<p>10/12 at most. 8-9/12 is my prediction.</p>

<p>The topic and your examples are good. They could use more analysis, but are specific enough. However, the essay is difficult to read. Some vocabulary, such as impeccable, is used incorrectly. There are many grammer errors and incorrect verb and tense usage problems. You might want to use simpler sentence structure, but with correct grammar. Right now I’d give this essay a 7-8/12</p>