<p>Hello everyone</p>
<p>I needed help in editing my college essay, and I also really need someone, probably with more general knowledge to read over my essay, so I thought since guys are older you would be a great choice. I know there a college essay section on the forum, but I need adult feedback as well. Thanks so much</p>
<p>Please rephrase “older” to receive more positive reception.</p>
<p>Kidding. I’d be happy to read your essay, akahmed. PM me.</p>
<p>Maybe wiser would’ve worked better :)</p>
<p>Well, I don’t like being called “you guys” by a total stranger asking for help. Rephrasing the request might attract more responses.</p>
<p>Ok, I’m sorry, let me rephrase that</p>
<p>Can you Please help me?</p>
<p>Why not ask one of the English teachers in your HS? That is what my S did and she was eager to help.</p>