<p>I am trying to get a jump start on the whole application process. I am intending on majoring in pre-pharmacy/pharmacy, and since these programs tend to fill up quickly, it is necessary for me to apply as early as possible. Basically my entire resume is in my previous posts (see Pharmacy dreams). I am having an awfully hard time writing this essay. I know once I get one of them done, I can basically use it for all my apps. If it is possible, I would like to know if you could please take a look at it and give me some advice. I have really no one else to ask for advice, and I’m unsure as to how effective that advice may be–please only non-co08ers. If you could, I would really appreciate your input. I just don’t think my essay is my best work, but I don’t know what to do.</p>
<p>I’d be glad to take a look. Just send it over.</p>
<p>ok…i wrote a totally new essay…topic is dealing w a lack of cultural diversity in my life and how attending a particular university will help benefit me and how i can attribute to the diverstiy</p>
<p>^^</p>
<p>Hmm I’m not sure if you want any constructive criticism - but this is my two-cents…</p>
<p>Talking about “lack of cultural diversity” strikes of “sheltered” and attending a particular university just because it has a higher ratio of minorities seems “phony”</p>
<p>But this is without seeing your actual essay. Ive noticed personally that trying to summarize my essay in 2 sentences makes it sound really weird…so maybe its just that</p>
<p>What do you think?</p>