Small Decisions Essay

<p>Please grade it! Thank you! </p>

<p>DO small decisions often have major consequences?</p>

<p>The Ancient Greek saying “Abide by life” means for one to acknowledge all parts of human life equally. Small decisions expand the scope of human troubles by lead to life threatening situations. Several historic examples clearly exemplify the destruction of small decisions.</p>

<p>Now lets meticously analyze India’s undaunted freedom fighter, Bagat Singh, who thought invading the royal palace, Bastille, would give his people freedom. As he stood on top of the palace his issued a scathing statement, " My people will kill those who disobey". His caustic words stimulated the government to attack him and his people. On June 17, 1789 the devious government tortured and slaughtered millions of people, he was stomped on and killed by virulent knives being penetrated through his squirmish eyes. Singh’s decision clearly demonstrates how small ignorant decisions can lead to a watershed of life.</p>

<p>Moreover, on January 29,2009, Governor Rob Boljevich was convicted on numerous charges of malfeasance. Most importantly because of his decision to nonchalantly exacerbate the wealthy bank accounts of his gullible victims when a small law was put in action. On December 25, 2008, the government had issued a law where the state government could see how much money was in their state citizens earn. By doing so, Boljevich began plotting schemes to override his citizens or “victims” to control their money. Consumed with cupidity, Boljevich consumed Illinois’s bank account and fled the country. Suddenly, Cable New Network’s (CNN) broadcast media spotted him in Olaqay, Jamaica. Boljevich was sentenced to life in prison. This momentous event could have been avoided if the government simple left income earnings private. Boljevich’s actions clearly demonstrate how small decisions can lead to life disaster. </p>

<p>Furthermore, Joseph Stalin, who ruled the Soviet Union from 1924 until his death decided to leave his safe bunker for some fresh air. Spotted by enemy French Troops, the soldiers decided to immediately invade the land. Consequences elevated for Stalin once his army was obliterated. Stalin surrendered and was shot multiple times around his face. Because Stalin wanted “fresh air” he ironically became fresh meat. It is clear how Stalin’s small decision lead to the Soviet Union’s destruction and his life being crushed. </p>

<p>All these historic examples demonstrate how life can change because of decisions that many don’t think thoroughly about. Treat life equally, along with decisions and actions. These so-called small decisions all destroyed the lives of Singh, Boljevich, and Stalin. Treat these small decisions as if they were precious babies; with care.</p>

<p>I made all of this up…</p>

<p>hahaha I give you 12 for being able to make this all up in 25 minutes.</p>

<p>Well, I won’t assign a score because I believe i’m in no way qualified enough to do so.
But these are my opinions: First of all, In many parts of the essay, it seems like you’re being a bit too ostentatious with your vocabulary. A bit of high-level, correctly used, vocab. placed here and there might impress the readers but in many parts of the essay, it seems a bit obvious that you’re trying (a bit too hard) to impress. Dont get me wrong, you might not be but that was the impression it gave me.
Secondly, your transitions are a bit too abrupt.
“Furthermore, Joseph Stalin, who ruled the Soviet Union from 1924 until his death decided to leave his safe bunker for some fresh air.”
Something like this should be better:
“Furthermore, the case of Joseph Stalin who…” (“case” doesnt really seem to be the apt word there though)</p>

<p>“Suddenly, Cable New Network’s (CNN) broadcast media spotted him in Olaqay, Jamaica.”
would also be better off as
“Cable New Network’s (CNN) broadcast media later spotted him in Olaqay, Jamaica.”</p>

<p>Just my two cents. In general, it’s not a bad essay at all and it is clear you know what you’re doing.</p>

<p>I need feedback!</p>

I would give you eight. Very little reasoning but excellent examples :smiley: