someone critique my wesleyan/vassar/wustl essay?

College Essays
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<p>It’s for the CommonApp, and it’s about spending forty-two nights in Pittsburgh this past summer. It’s actually been in the making since 4 hours ago :slight_smile: because I felt suddenly inspired when I walked out of the library. </p>

<p>So, any readers (preferably non-09 or has already been accepted, or 150+ poster) :]</p>

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<p><a href=“http://talk.collegeconfidential.com/members/g0ldenboy.html[/url]”>http://talk.collegeconfidential.com/members/g0ldenboy.html&lt;/a&gt; that was my old account…i can read if you like. i am an 09er but am not applying to those schools and would not steal.</p>