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<p>Topic: describe a historical figure, a fictional being or work of art that has influenced you. Describe that influence </p>

<p>The Shrinking Violet</p>

<p>Timid: feeling or showing a lack of courage or confidence; easily frightened. I never acknowledged it, or perhaps I never cared to but I have been shy as long as I could remember. Each year in school I was the kid being pulled aside by the teacher to be asked, “Are you OK?” and “Why aren’t you talking to the other kids?” Right up to high school I almost never started conversations with others. I was always mousy girl so afraid to ask for what I wanted or to simply meet someone new that was frequently asked to speak up. The girl with the “little voice.” I was the girl too shy to order my food, to speak to the guy who asked how I was doing today but in the midst of all my daily self-alienation I met Tsukimi.</p>

<p>Tsukimi Kurashita, the protagonist of Aiko Higashima’s popular anime Princess Jellyfish is a fictional character of the two-dimensional kind who has inspired me greatly. Tsukimi is an eighteen year old otaku (otaku: an avid collector or enthusiast esp. One who is obsessed with anime, video games, or computers and rarely leaves home) who moved to Tokyo to pursue a career in illustration. She moves into a woman only boarding house with women just as otaku and awkward as she is. Tsukimi tends to have trouble communicating with guys and also exhibits fear of the “stylish,” people who dress well and are socially radiant. In just eleven episodes I watched Tsukimi grow. I grew with her. I not only understood all of her small yet insignificant defeats but shared them with her. I felt the nervousness in my stomach when someone new spoke to me. I too felt intimidated when a radiant social butterfly flew my way. I was like Tsukimi. Tsukimi’s experiences were my experiences and seeing her progression inspired me to be different. </p>

<pre><code> Through Tsukimi I was comforted by the fact that I wasn’t alone. I was faced with the realization that many other people have trouble in social situations too. Watching this anime and watching Tsukimi opened me up in ways I couldn’t imagine. Through Tsukimi I found them courage to speak in my classes, even if only a little at first. I even joined some clubs and activities. Tsukimi showed me that it was OK to play dress up and feel beautiful for once. She showed me how to be confident. Tsukimi showed me that it was OK to be an otaku and that it’s alright to embrace it. That I should embrace it. Tsukimi taught me that it is OK to show my silly side, that I should talk about the things I love. Through Tsukimi I learned I shouldn’t let my fears limit be that no matter how hard it was to reach out today that it only gets easier each time and that i should keep reading towards a brighter tomorrow. Without Tsukimi I don’t know if I would have grown the way I did over the years. Would I have sat there in lunch? Would I have gone to that sleepover? Would I have contributed my thoughts to that class discussion. These seem like such trivial things but each of these things teletext one of the many baby steps I took to come out of my shell. Through Tsukimi I found the power to break free of the shackles of shyness. Tsukimi Kurashita gave me the power to not let my shyness dictate my life. She helped me find myself, love myself as Briana the silly otaku who builds computers and plays video games. The girl who finds peace in art and new adventures through literature. College is an entirely new journey for this girl and although I am nervous and will be on my own soon I hope to greet new experiences with open arms. I hope to embrace every challenge as a new beginning with how that this caterpillar will one day become a radiant butterfly herself.
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<li>Don’t post your essays on an open forum where they can be stolen.</li>
<li>Please, please, please don’t start with a definition. I’m begging you. That’s on the list of the most unoriginal, boring openers. See here: <a href=“Dictionary definitions as essay openers? - Applying to College - College Confidential Forums”>http://talk.collegeconfidential.com/college-admissions/1667743-dictionary-definitions-as-essay-openers.html&lt;/a&gt;&lt;/li&gt;
<li>You need an English teacher to go over this. It’s missing quite a few commas and also has a noticeable number of sentence fragments that seem awkward.</li>
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<p>… Thank you</p>